I can hear Zuko’s voice in my head. You’ve got him down AMAZINGLY well.

Kudos.

love the introspective piece from Hakoda.

Great fic!

3!

I loved it

Nicely done!

That was very beautifully said. And if you hadn't pointed it out, I wouldn't have noticed any language errors.I like how blunt and unflourished his version of events is. Too many times authors make him too talkative, practically telling it how Iroh did. Iroh was full of sympathy and clearly faulted Ozai (as he should). But Zuko probably remembers it not only with fear and trembling-but self-loathing. He no longer regrets speaking out, but he now regrets expecting anything less of his father. He blames himself for it. His father constantly reminded him of his weaknesses and faults-so he takes every action and thought seriously.

Basically, you're awesome.

This story was really good.

Wow. That was really good! I'm really surprised that english isn't your first language. Your vocabulary in here is amazing and this story is just really well done. It was an unusual idea to put it in Hakoda's perspective, but it worked really well. Great job!

I liked! Your English is really good, congratulations! By the way "character" is spelled with an"c," not a "k."

Loved it! :)

This was very good and very realistic to what probably actually took place. Good job at being an emotion jerker

I really like this, I think Zuko really would tense up like that.

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That was really good. I truthfully never would have guessed you didn't speak English naturally. I seriously wouldn't have noticed. You have great grammar, it was a good story and Fan Fiction needs to make a favorite button at the top specifically for one-shots so you can both favorite and review without giving up one or the other.

You rock!

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