This is a very good start to a story and I would love to see you continue it sometime.

Another basic lore failure. "modified healing device" It's gotta have another power source completely since it relies on Naquada in the user's bloodstream normally. Which Jaffa do not. Hopefully its not hand held like the original. Plus all this must attract attention from her superiors. The strange armor, the new tech etc being used by these Jaffa of hers. Not to mention the previous attention she might have garnered from selecting a female First Prime. Begs the question how her superiors are gonna react.

The entire force of 100 Jaffa are composed solely of females? Seriously? I can understand picking some of the more qualified and unpolished gems but I doubt there were 100 Kyra's to choose from. Females are inherently have far weaker upper body strength. That's not an insurmountable handicap to overcome with skill and training but it is a handicap. And then there depicted here carrying heavy crates... A job that most definitely requires upper body strength to do.

Plasma rifles and cannons... these are no longer Jaffa then but a Tuari marines *rolls eyes*. One of the reasons you know for the Staff weapon's length is because its a dual purpose weapon. That can be used not only at range but in melee as well. Fuck... You had them get grenades too! Bra'Tack Apophis's most famous warriors didnt even know of the concept of grenades when O'Niell used one to destroy a mothership's shield generator. Jaffa do not use grenades...

You should have kept them Jaffa or at the very least have this story set after Apophis's defeat at the hands of the Tuari. At least then you could make the excuse your intimating the Tuari intentionally due to their proven effectiveness in battle. I mean the Greek Successor states did a similar thing intimating Rome's legionaries in equipment and battle tactics. But no special protagonist gotta innovate and make entirely new shit and combat equipment from scratch despite earlier saying she has none from her progenitors memories. Literally pulled from her loli butt.

I like most of this story but its getting a few things "wrong" in my opinion. First the whole training complex was a bit too advanced compared to what we saw in SG1. The hologram technology in it seems too advanced for what the Go'ould could do at the time. What we saw in SG1 were Jaffa training with wooden training dummies and using wooden staffs in arena fights.

Same for the OP Jaffa armor she makes. She only has the knowledge of her progenitors but seems capable of shit only Anubis could do with Ancient knowledge. Since the armor is capable of withstanding DOZENS of staff weapons discharges its basically analogous to Kull Armor.

Please update soon, this is amazing

This is great i really like you have to update soon

Love this story, I can’t wait to see more, when’s the next chapter going up? Also is there a description of what the Jaffa weapons and armour look like, I can’t find any, same for limited clothes and her daughters and Priscilla’s, basically I can’t find any clothing descriptions and few physical descriptions.

I hope you'll update again soon :( its been 8 years :(

simple solution to the aschen problem, throw naquada bombs through the stargates at every aschen world? :P no stargate you starve aschen prime within a year.

Really cool story I hope you continue it one day

I absolutely love this story. It seems realistic enough considering the series it is taking place in, which is far from realistic, as that contains serious plot-holes. Don't be too discouraged by some other reviews. While the story is very female dominant and lilliths empire is slightly dismissive of males, it should be noted that male jaffa are not really worthy of respect.

In the series teal'c and bra'tac are two of the more intelligent and thinking jaffa. However, they both have several moments of stupidity (especially in the beginning of the show), in particular their lack of foresight. Other jaffa in the FJN show just how deep the indoctrination actually is. The series even goes as far as showing a jaffa tribe that has been free from the goa'uld for 10.000 years, which is not any more advanced in any way than any other group of jaffa. Because the goa'uld do not train the jaffa themselves, but rather let other jaffa do it, and jaffa are dismissive of females as fighters, the indoctrination of females is slightly less. The reason for lilliths choice of female jaffa is well explained in the story.

The situation in this story makes for a quite interesting idea that is not repeated very often. The stories uniqueness and down to earth (or Eratna) point of view create a really interesting setting for this story. Although, the story does tend to skip over some things a bit. It still is a good story unlike most others. I hope you continue it soon, as the notes in the story seem to suggest where you want the story to go.

its not bad but you trow numbers around without second thought and the whole strategy is just bad. nanites to destroy symbiotes, biowarefare to destroy symbiotes, importing all slave worlds and taking the stargate with them. these are just a few logical steps

an hatak is 1km wide so a flagship 100 times that is just absurd

i find it a little hard to believe that 1 of lilliths jaffa cosr the same a 100 of a system lord. in our economy maybe but goauld dont have that they count in naquada and if you trow 100 staff weapons on 1 jaffa he or in this case she is burried under weapons, so no it doesnt make sence it could take more time and maybe 1,5 the amount of materials but once you've uplifted their mining facilities this problem becomes moot

Probably one of the best Stargates stories I've ever read.

I love the story. Please continue it some day.