that's so great and hot!

I really enjoyed reading this, not just for the insight but for the skill alone. I was actually going to try and write a rorschach fanfiction starting with what actually happened and then a possible "what if" which is stupid and impossible I know. The only problem is I don't know what to do. This was so well written that I was hoping I could get some input? I think you should continue writing :)

This is really good I like it 3 /.\

Sheer brilliance o.o i loved it.

The entire oneshot was fantastic, but I especially loved the last two lines. They wrapped it up quite nicely.

-MaXdana

I LOVED it!

I think you managed to capture te essence of the character, it actually sounds pretty much like Rorschach, the way he would react and feel about the whole situation.

I really enjoyed reading your story. :) As a Rorschach fan, I say "Tank you very much!"

what lady jekyll said. i love this violent little guy.

Nice! I love it :D Awesome and in character

Very well done and in character. I especially like that he's not just conflicted about his weakness, but about whether she deserves to be called a whore. There's only one thing I'd change: the split-personality references to Walter as a separate person. I'd leave them out just until that last great line at the end. There's already enough believable conflict in his thoughts, you don't need to overstate the divide like that. If that last line was the first time you mentioned Walter's name, it would have that much more weight.

It was good.

One mistake:

"Calling his latest skirmish with the scum of the city that night ‘rough’ would have been and overstatement. "

should be:

"...been an understatement."

damn thats hot

and hes not ooc at all!

nice job!

Awesomely in character. Kudos to you.

Well written. I liked it, despite the S/C. You kept him in character very nicely.

~Irina

Very interersting portrayal there. I imagine this would be just how such a repressed, self-vicious character such as Rorschach would experience lust: with conflict, with excuses, with all the opposite emotions that a saner man would feel. You didn't turn it into pornography as i feared you might, but kept it exaclty where sex belongs: for the most part, in the realm of the character's imagination.

I especially appreciated the last lines. You took what could have been shallow and made it philosophical. Walter became Rorschach in response to his inability to fight evil and punish it, essentially denying his own humanity to adopt a persona that he fould more suitable. I do not believe, whatever he says, that his removal of the mask at the end of the story was because of the heat. Its a symbolic act, wanting to experience even a small amount of passion and closeness to someone he will never even see again, if only in his imagination. He takes his mask off to be Walter for even a moment to allow himself humanity for just a short while, even if it is in terms of an imaginary sexual encounter with a complete stranger.

Enought said. Good work.

I liked this. It was a good dichotomy between persons. Within Rorschach's own undaunted black and white view of the world there's gotta be some room for his own mistakes, eh? Nicely written.