Yayy!
(Nessie:"he kissed me"
Edward:*go to kill him*)

Update plz

I think you should have added more chapters, and gradually increased Matthew and Renesmee's relationship. This was way to quick, but I loved how you took your own characters and Stephanie Meyer's characters and made the your own.

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BITTEN matthew stop then BIT ME HARDER THEN drained my blood good takie bher then sUCESSFULLY changed With him then left me deceased three days later colorless thenmy powers were modied more advanced Where is our child oh my god here I am healed Crimson eyes it HBURTS MAKE IT STOP BURNING HER screamed THE VENOM FROM rATTLESNAKE DRANKED BLOOD THE VERY AS ALL FLED STOP NEWBORNS WITH MORE killed torn from Here then were severed from both with three with galactic allies shattering from here that with him destroyed burnt forever with released Help me C Gradfather he's bitten that Mthew Cullen risen that fatal night as a Vampire with mazillions blacked outside then popped freely you and the newborn are guilty of murder Felix then RIPPED Then our bodies laid there then suddenly taken then suddenly without both that tey risen in our home as Vampires with myself Alice they did to my imprint with them with us we removed your seeds followed ugh my throat burns like crap oh god I have a powere it's Geogensis it 's a ablity gasp his eyes are Crimson with more that was it hunting season but into mazillions of cities around the planet then blazing freely popped viciously then lost the ablity to die brought in here that was it more than drained we were hosts mixed then blacked outside then each both brought in here with blood on the mouths they executed them but torn from here destroyed from existence murdered suddenly guards were more than all of them murdered as all of them in time/space wisdom suddenly came flatlining then brought here then reported they broke this law for biting a human our orders to execute the accused here they pleaded not guilty then murdered then ripped from as all of them were as all of them but it came a Vision from my own freaky aunt was a seer a real psychic ohg my GOD! BOOM! popped freely of lifeless bodies then brought in here we of the guard sentence ye by law for murdering the Vulcan guilty by him that was it killed that her vision more modified more enhanced they know who he is hiding a rouge Vampire surgrial altered to look like one I am a hybrid I need blood hide me I am really need is a blood of a virgin to begin my ritual that was it then blazed from here with myself these ones burst freely that took as all of he smelt alien but extraterrestrial blazed then suddenly it was too late where am I I got a headache he felt it a real thing erupting Mt Helens right off it's top mess with me you'r Sushi yokai he was trained from the fire formed a Movie gun he was not human but blasted freely with myself then with them then lost the ablity to be killed but murdered but popped from here then taken but punished us now reported then it was too late killed were slain then the seer found out his birthright was from Tyr god of war then as all of them were demigods so myself blacked outside then popped then vanished but mess with Nessie you are Le-Matya chow he was gifted but most powerful person he heals how I am a daywalker he was toned by now was Muscular oh my god I look like a Wrestler crap I am very sorry I am toned from sports bingo you have a gift young man you have become a new person then then night fallen but burst freely with as all of them vanishing then no longer alive but undead then the world finally evolved as all of it no longer with supernaturals cremated waxed but killed for safe keep[ing in glass coffins the humans never had more children again but were sick frail oldest people were weaken by illnesses and disease then all of them taken from here then no longer their world then killed then killed with the bodies killed were cremated mazillions of as all more much many more guards expoding then shattered the children more than as all of them came too late our world just reborn itself with Supernatural beings as all of them took their places then followed with us/all remains then lost the ablity to mate saved from death that changed forced to go what we wanted was Vengeance then told her crows Phobos and Deimos fear and terror we are immortal make us lethal assassins with the werewolves I want is a unification of races to band for war and a battle their yowling cawing were granted made us/as very all Avengers of the gods and goddesses heed thy prayer I will sacrifice a boon to animals as your priestess oh my god it been sent to the gods and goddesses Momma mia oh no war and a battle like on Vulcan how you speak Greek my turn he began to speak in Asgardian Norse from Thor the Dark World Heed thy oath thee nay words I am Tyr's demigod son grant thy justice I spill a boon thy orders to Father oh my god he learned from the movie look down oh man that news reached the palace sires a boon they are at war but are blasted from here as all taken care but bring the very as all bodies that was it survival and a war that explode the fiurst officer trained him with them e who is that man oh god you are muscular wanna bet punk he was tough recalled his last life with mine he was training himself using from his godly father's fire powers of war and conquest in his blood was a scorching so myself were trained with them the harder we tone up the longer we were warriors to fight them blazing freely but lost bodies then were much many more than more monstrous that's it my own mother let loose a Xena warrior princess's war cry ripped of battle had bangs so do I were fiercer warrior sent from Asgard to fight not so human beings oh my god you are what toned so your daughter mess with us turkeys this our battle our Raganrok oh no then blacked out but r where are we in but the things deported but as all of them found bodies had the both burnt then much many more guards then split our species of all jumped warp drive reached Vulcan then unable to return now with three no longer our planet ther ir world but it really happened as all of them were in hiding now on Vulcan he was built by now they with us/them years back were gone then exploding with more than all of them but shattered then reborn new again but lived eternal lives then lost the bodies to them but taken from here.

DUUUDE, YOU HAVE TO CONTINUE THIS! I HAVE TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS AGH PLEAAAASE

I wish you have continued should fell for a human like Matthew and not Jake!

LOVE IT! Nessie in love with human; to die for. Finally Jacob will be out of Edward and Bella's life. I wish the story had continued.

keep writing maybe Jacobs pov

pretty good write more stories

I would like it...even more if you UPDATED!

Marie, all I can say is...STALKER! AAAWWWWW! NessiexMatt...Now, for a couple name...

Matthew and Nessie, sitting in a tree! K-I-S-S-I-N-G!

I can't believe it...Renesmee...ate...food. And didn't complain...SOMEBODY TAKE A PICTURE!

Ummmmmm...Click, what are you doing in Victoria's Secret?

OMG! Usually, I love JacobxNessie, but this Oc is cool, so as long as I see a jealous Jacob, we're good. Loved this!