First, lol, you can't sit in a cloud.
Second, he turned blue? Lol wouldn't be like pink,(red would be anger) or something? Lol but cute

Nope it is just fine

HELL YES U SHOULD

Yep, yep! SEQUEL SEQUEL!

Please,please,please write a sequel!

(Wow, I sound desperate. Which I am not. Desperate, I mean.)

I don't know if you made another one but if you didn't Please do it's SOO Good!

YOU BETTER MAKE A DAMN SEQUAL! Sorry, I lost myself.. great writting! WRITE MORE! (says in monster deep voice)

Sequel! sequel! sequel!

oohh r u going to update? I want to see what Dash'll do

THAT WAS AWSOME! YOU NEED TO RIGHT MORE! *BITES XOloveXO's head off* *glues head back on to write more stories* Oops... forgot *shoves brain back up through nose*

He he... *blushes..* As I was saying... Oh yea.. WRITE MORE! *veins pop out of neck*

Hiya Midnight Water Vamp here lol!

I loved it :) i say u shuld make a sequel :)

Keep it up :)

Luv Midnight Water Vamp xx Hope u take my advice and do a sequel :) ICE CREAM lol!

You should make a sequel...And have Dash die a horrible, flaming, "accidental" death. As for this chapter however it was really good. I look forward to more of your work

yes, make a sequel!

Sequel! Sequel! Sequel!

yeah, I think a sequel would be good.