hey please update the story i really want to know what happens next this is so intriguing!

The first part made it sound like a affair gone wrong

I loved what you did with this

Please finish this story!

I thought you did really well with this chapter.

I liked the dialect added; it was interesting and dead on I feel.

Hey, I was just rereading my fave epov stories, and I've just now realized you haven't finished this! Please continue this and don't forget about it :(

dsfas

Just thought you should know the Arabic in this chapter makes no sense what so ever. It's meant to be Battle Hymn of the Republic in Arabic but you've got well the words are the below:

"Senior Board Aaoxs Maine you Fu no Gluar d Vanier de Stokes de cents Board Resens"

Yeah it makes as much sense as it does to me. I speak Arabic so thought i should let you know.

Anyway apart from that it is an excellent story that is well written and shows a clear perspective of Edward's view.

Looking forward to reading other work by you

Katey

Well, this is probably the best fan fic I've read in Edward's point of view. This doesn't mean it is without flaws however, but they are minor. Grammar, and occasionally spelling, and probably the one that bothers me most, overuse of the word forth. This may have been intentional, but forth is one of those words that is great until the use becomes excessive, then it becomes annoying, however, I thouroughly enjoyed it and am looking forward to your next update.

why you stop?

hotdog fight over hotdog

cow jacob's joke

warmjake is really warm

sure...I'll review...aresome

aresome!

WOW. That was aresome...