i love this story it is awesome and I love this series :) & I’m happy that Edward is taking care of Bella Little Sister

Omg! I can't wait till the romance!;);)
*(squeals)*

Hello,

I was curious because the plot seemed quite interesting. But...oh my. Does the girl ever stop to sob. She's always sobbing, fainting or having flashbacks which lead to the above.

Also: are you coping with the death of your children or just trying too hard? I mean come on...it's unrealistic.

You should edit the story. (Errors pointed out in numerous reviews before mine)

Yours sincerely,
Steph

Loving how their code names are dc charachters!

Ok..there is a huge problem..her mother is staying at the same hotel that couples got killed in..and bella didn't warn her or something..um..take care..there are a lot of little important things u have to keep yur eye on in writing smth..

Does you bella never stop "sobbing?" I mean she is too "sobby"

Nice story,

though.

Totally awsome story it rockes

Your Poem... Is not that good...

I liked the start of this story, I think the plot was a bit far-fetched, with all the murders connected with Bella. I feel that being under cover means, not revealing your identity to anyone, but the Police, so they should not have been able to give away their identity away to the hotel manager as he could have been the one doing the killings. Same goes for Bella's mum, she would not be able to talk so freely about being undercover when seeing her mother. The story line was good, I just think it progressed more than I would have liked. You're a good writer though, and I have never been mean on a review before, I just thought I'd say what I thought. The story line was amazing though.

really odd that bella would still be so upset and hurt that her boyfriend from years ago would cheat on her.

it sounded like edward followed bella promptly after she left the crime scene with the receptionist. thus I highly doubt she would have lost so much blood in the one or two minutes it took for edward to follow her to pass out. plus, if she is so unstable that she's cutting herself she wouldn't be leading this case,even if she's intimately involved in the psychology of the killer.

it seems a bit of a jump for edward to state everyone murdered is related/knows bella. no backround informarion has been given on the other victims of the previous attacks; it's a random comment. this bit is moving a bit fast for my taste. not enough detail or progression of plot. it's jumping from here to there without drawing the lines between them.

plot moving along quickly and its not boring. just they are truly brandying their actual names about. it this is a serious mission, why would they be addressing themselves by their own names where anyone could hear them?

it's odd that renee and her husnand would go on a second honey moon soon after the birth of their daughter. i would have expected bella to get upset over their temporary abandonment of their daughter because she lost her son as a newborn

funny. I was chuckling.