A whole bunch of tricksters playing tricks on each other, with Sarah at the centre of it all! Marvellous work! Thanks.

I loathed Jareth in this story. I'd have gladly caused him harm many times. But I could never weave a midsummer night's dream into a story.
Not sure how I feel about the ending but guess the fact I read it quickly been work and sleep speaks for itself.

*smashes that stupid crystal in his face*

Serves him right, let him suffer.

What a crappy first time. Quick and with a stranger. Gareth deserves a trip to an oubliette.

I loved this story so much. I was a little worried when I started it based on a review I saw complaining about the ending but I having finished it myself, I have no complaints. Well done!

I didn't like how that ended. I wished she would have asked Oberon for some loophole for sanctuary. She was left enslaved. That Sucks! He never learned a damn thing. Totally heartless, even with a tiny fragment if emotions, with exception to egotistical ones. BUMMER!

I probably would have punched him at least once. He deserves it. well written!

Isn't it Titania instead of Tatiana?

Isn't it Titania, instead of Tatiana?

I can't believe you kept this plot development going for so long... No court would argue about the custody rights of a child without a paternity test first, it's the obvious way for Sarah to get out of this scenario. This whole thing is rediculous and unbelievable.

Hands down, best Labyrinth fanfic I've read...I could Not stop reading..!

Not certain how I feel about this quite yet. While I adore the concept and think it brilliantly fitting, the occasional stumble over grammatical inconsistencies and misuse of terms makes enjoyment of the tale a more muted experience.
I'm curious to know why you went with "Tatiana" instead of the traditional name for the Faerie Queen, "Titania" - it doesn't seem intentional, which is confusing because you seem to be familiar with the original work.

Thank you for another magnificent story

So... I hate being preachy because this is a beautifully written story, with amazing detail, but I just can't keep silent. what Jareth did was very close to rape (I see very little difference between his and Hayden's petulance and possessiveness) and his continued efforts to "punish" Sarah I honestly feel are unjustified. Other stories have used that plot point that Sarah did cheat/steal power from Jareth wth the "my power is as great" or defeating the GK damages his power, but I simply did not get a believable and logical justification for Jareth's truly frightening need for revenge. There are the subtle hints of affection given by the presents and the nursery, but those were far too few and (for the former especially) motivated by selfish desire to control/mark and even inspired by others. I'm also confused a little about Hiver, I just feel a better justification for her acts, other than blood purity (jealousy of status? Rejection from Jareth?) would make more sense in context of this story
Lastly, Jareth showing absolutely no remorse for the struggles/intentional impregnantion (normally a happy event, but he MADE this happen, taking away Sarah's choice-like rape) which actually makes me question Sarah. So far the qualities about this Sarah we're given to admire are her beauty and the sass she's able to produce when dealing with men (the exception being the airline, which though funny was so out of the blue and never followed up on that I'm just puzzled now. Do you work for Delta or something?), making her just an object for men. Sarah's forever gasping and having things happen TO her, the into action she takes, to seek the store, just feeds into Jareth's plan. I started getting exasperated with JARETH for finding her attractive because even he, despite calling her dangerous and formidable, seems only the value her for her body/producing a son. Is her kingdom really as great?
I kept going, in vain hope, simply because the wealth of detail and care you've infused in this story is formidable and admirable, indicative of a truly thoughtful and attentive writer, so I'm sorry I was disappointed, but I felt I couldn't leave without giving this feedback, and I hope you take it in the supportive, respectful manner it was intended. The Shakepeare integration was lovely to read, though there are some occasional typos and I am still logically stymied that Jareth was able to get away with having sex on stage. NO ONE saw anything? He just was in and out like that? Poor virgin Sarah had no idea.
Lastly (again) I was so very confused about Papa. I do not believe that Oberon would ever call him that, and his real name seemed like such a secret when really it was less impressive than the leading up. I'm disappointed again that Papa was also okay that oh just because the potion was fake Jareth's torture, abusive language, bullying, onstage sex and abandonment, it's fine that this happened to someone he considered a daughter.
Perhaps you meant to capitalize on the darkness of Jareth, which I have enjoyed in other stories, but they were unapologetically dark. The way Jareth treats Sarah, and the way she takes, this feckless woman was hard to admire or sympathize with. I genuinely thought Fred would make it, even though (of course) Jareth is THE One, but he was such an ass in this story, and not a very likeable one either. I wouldn't want to take up with a man who acted like he was 5, even if he was an insanely sexy 5yo.
I hope you'll excuse me being blunt, but you obviously care a great deal for your writing and I only want to help, in my own patronizing (like Jareth) and somewhat unfortunate (like Sarah) way. Poor kid.
Oh and I'm sure you're much older now and have different style so please don't respond to this if you are annoyed I'm critiquing a decade old story far too late to change or rewrite it

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