Reviews for Tales of Fire Team charlie during Halo 1, 2 and 3 |
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Ralf Jones chapter 8 . 11/21/2007 Great! Nice chapter! |
Lord Europe chapter 8 . 11/2/2007 who goes on dates when they are in battle and are fighting for their life? |
SnappleAddict chapter 1 . 11/1/2007 Yeah, definetly needs some work in the grammer department, and you could try capitializing things that need it, i.e. Master Chief, not master Chief. PS: Do NOT read Call of Duty, by Chris. It is TEH SUCK!1!1 zOMG! Just a horrible rip off of every action movie every made. Quite literally. Borders on uber plagerism. |
Kavek chapter 7 . 11/1/2007 Let's see... not much I can say here. Your actual writing is okay... a little on the shaky side, but acceptable. The plotting is... fast, to say the least. I might drag out each section a bit more to give some room for character development and actual plot beyond following the Halo story. Hmm... too many cigars. Ever smoked one? It takes a while to actually finish the darn thing. If I were you, I'd limit it to one cigar every two chapters - if you MUST have him constantly lighting up. Too many references, and I get a mental picture of Johnson with about six stogies in his mouth at once. There are some technical issues - like spelling, grammar, and capitalization. Word to the wise: run your writing through Microsoft Word and use its grammar/spell-check function. That'll take care of most of your formatting problems. Good usage of in-game dialogue, but I would try not to entirely rely on that. Use some of that creativity you showed in the first chapter. And where's the Johnson/Foehammer? ;-) |
Ralf Jones chapter 4 . 9/25/2007 Nice ! Please update soon ! |
Ralf Jones chapter 3 . 9/4/2007 Nice! Awesome work ! Keep Going ! |
Kepacho chapter 1 . 8/30/2007 this is getting some where. just in the beggining the Deep breath yea um its uncapitalize. the rest is good really. read my story! Call of Duty! |