OMG. After re-watching the series, I felt that Royia were not given enough spotlight and your fanfic made me happyyyyu

I love it

I love this 3 you did a great job

i see... this is very well written i only just reached the episode where this takes place or at least where it begins.

all i can say is... d'aaaaaaaawww

I like it. Made me smile in joy. As for constructive criticism the thing I look for the most in writing is the flow of words and how you use them to describe. You should keep an eye out from using the same word frequently in a short time. Like "I've hardly seen you afraid, let alone...seeming so...vulnerable and...so afraid." If it were me I would have ended the sentence at vulnerable, or picked a more powerful word then afraid so not to use it twice. Keep an eye out for near repeating like that or words that are close like afraid and scared. You do well in telling what they are doing but try taking out some of the he and hers. Like instead of "he wrapped his arms around her naked body." where this is the second sentence in a row that you have started with he you could write something like "Slowly his arms wrap around he shaking body...". It makes it more of a show the reader what is happening rather then telling them every move Roy and Riza make. I hope that helps.

good, but riza seems a little out of character, but good.

Frickin beautiful 3

RIIIZZZAAAAA NOOOO! Y U MAKE HER SUFFER?!
lol, on a serious note though I liked it, not too fluffy, not to "lemon-y", just like the anime.

I really like it some words were mispelled though

I liked that :)

Omg, I loved this story so much :) You are an amazing author, and I think you captured the character's personalities really well without spoiling it. I don't think there is anything you can improve: it was perfect!

OMG that was sooo lovely & cute!

I really enjoyed reading this!

wow. that. was. amazing. though at one point it seemed like the shadows had raped her...AAAAANNNyway. i just have to say. that was the best royai story ive read yet.