it was really good ! lol keep it up ,you make it seem so romantic ,and that's what i'm looking for ,ty

Loved it nicely done

Interesting, in a weird way.

first of all i am pretty sure kyoko never swears or if she does it doesn't have fuck in her sentence lol. it's weird but good to a point

the beginning was ok but the ending wasn't.

Naw! thats so cute, i wish i had someone like ren. and that was so sweet, ren and kyoko are so cute together.

very ooc.

I love this! I love this! *goes off to sing little song of happiness*

It's great! The way he used her anger with Sho to make her want to skip some grades! Haha!

~Ashlyn

not bad although the end just fell apart! :) i bet thats where u just gave up right? ;) nice job though!

I absolutely love skip-beat and you have ruined my take on any fan fiction. Not only were the characters so out of character it's hard to believe that they were skip beat characters, but you rushed the story so much that it didn't mean anything. Not to mention Kyoko isn't the type of person to cuss, and she's not pure evil either.

The grammar and everything was very good, but why was the story rushed and I don't quite understand why she would ask for help with revenge again Sho, Ren had nothing to do with how Sho treated Kyoko and Ren would never agree to help her. Also Ren is trying to get out of a relationship with her and would probably never tell her he was corn. Have you not read the part where she thinks corn was a fairy prince?

You should defiantly warn people that the characters are way out of Character

Aww, really cute!

what r flames? i liked this tho and i argree he probably did love her as corn to!

Ren doesn't slip up like that, and he argues himself out of a relationship with her, not argues with her for having a relationship. He's ooc here, sorry. And Kyoko, swearing? Why are you doing this to us? This could have been good, if you'd slowed it down and allowed us more insight into her shock and hope, confusion and disbelief at finding out about Corn. I hope you will rewrite this. It was good all the way until "Like the ones with your mother?". Then it went very melodramatic.

i absolutely love it! are there any more chapters you can write?

oh my god that was just so sweet, i so loved the way you had ren be prosented in this fic

great job totaly like it

lots of love eralda