I loved some of the wording you used!

Ohh o.O Nice one. I like Raito being a little sadistic. And I think they were in character.

The way you changed from dream to awake state was very realistic *nod nod*

Guh. That was SEXTASTIC. You might want to up the rating to M.

Ah. *Blush*

I felt oddly guilty while reading this.

FanGirlGuilt. :D