very nice ]

I liked the ending how you managed to sneak a life lesson in there.

WHOO an update! ]] it was very good but...can the principal really suspend them for that...? that seemed a litle unbelieveable..

wow ... nice

Well... I guess we know where Louis' issues come from. Or wait, is this happening after the events of the last two chapters?

It was a much better chapter than the past two. Good work!

Still promising, and clearly it's forming into a more complete story... I like that it's first person from both of their POV's, that's always fun.

The one problem is this: it is still way too short.

I would shoot for a minimum of 10 words per chapter, personally- which is about 4 pages in Word. At the very least, push it to about 500 words a chapter.

Also, you need to double space between paragraphs before you upload (or after using the edit/preview feature), otherwise it's all bunched up into one long paragraph- which, maybe you intended, but I thought I'd give you the head's up just in case.

But other than that, good work and I look forward to an update!

Whoo! The story is starting to make sense, but the chapters are still wayy too short. Combine like 3 or 4 of the chapters and thats a typical chapter length. I loove it! I would love to see another R/T story started! Keep it up.

nice. i like it.

I liked it alot, but it was awfully short. I think you should maybe add another, longer chapter.

Pretty good. It could have been better -all you need to do is flesh it out a bit. You leave the reader unfufilled and confused as to why Louis is so nonchalent about Ren and Tawny dating. Is it because Ren simply was off base thinking Louis hated gay people? Is he just pretending not care? Is he secretly plotting to get back at Ren?

You have a lot of potential. I'd LOVE to see you write a chapter R/T fic.

Pretty good.

I mean, it's very incomplete, but that's usually the way of it with one-shots.

And it seems weird that Ren assumes Louis "hates gay people" and then he ends up being ok with it. It begs the question: did he say or do something to give her that impression?

Anyway, I think you show potential for writing a longer story centering on these two.