want more!

I want to see more of this.

not rally any spelling mistaks as far as i could see.

VERY good writing also.

update when you can!]

the elephants stole my weed.

Interesting...looking forward to seeing where this goes...that is if you are going to write more to it.

Wow. That is a very interesting concept. I look forward to seeing where this story goes.

Awesome idea!

Now there's an interesting concept. What, does John belong to the Wraith from Common Ground now? Geez... You should keep going with this. Very interesting.

That's a fascinating theory...and kinda dark, character-wise. From what I've seen so far, you could really take this to interesting places!

Wow! Great start! You've managed to get my mind literally reeling with the possibilities for upcoming chapters. Can't wait to see where you take this!

Interesting idea and twist here, I think you should continue this idea into a longer story, there's plenty of potential.

Good work.

This is an original and interesting idea. I'll definitely be reading this story.