Excellent novelization, especially the progression of Henry and Eileen's relationship!

One critique: I feel that the final sentence of the epilogue should be something like: "If nothing else, Walter Sullivan taught me that." As it is now, the final sentence feels more like something that should be in a prologue.

I deleted your comment because it was NOT constructive.

You admitted yourself that you only read the first half of the first page of my story, then you complained that I didn't reveal a plot twist during the prologue. That is not how storytelling works. Had you been paying attention to what you were reading, you might have picked up on the fact that I was hinting that Henry was experiencing someone else's memories ("What made it stranger is that I didn't even remember HAVING a TV"-why would he think that was strange if those were his own memories?)

And had you actually read the whole story you would have seen that I reveal that Henry was experiencing Joseph's memories-he realizes in in a natural way AFTER seeing Joseph's apartment and that is where he makes the connection.

I am more than happy to listen to CONSTRUCTIVE criticism when it is given. Your comment was NOT constructive. You read MAYBE half of the prologue and decided immediately that I don't know anything about Silent Hill 4 because I didn't reveal everything on the first page.

I am done talking to you. Please don't bother me with this nonsense anymore.

Our previous comment has been deleted. Someone doesn't take productive criticism well it seems. Your novel is your personal reinterpretation, and a bad one at that. You haven't done your homework. In our deleted comment we provided some examples (e.g. the first scene is not Henry waking up, but Joseph Schreiber, Henry wakes up in the next scene when we see him in third person for the first time). Perhaps you delete all comments that dislike this content, leaving all the praise to bask in and boost your ego. Sad.

Sephi aka Chris Ridgeway here. I'd recommend being more specific about the "cat" sound the dogs make. I have a vivid memory of it sounding almost like a wild cat. Like a jaguar or a cheetah or some such thing. Idk Just a minor detail but with everything else being so descriptive, it might help. I also was slightly surprised he didn't appreciate Cynthia's advances more, but he is the shy gentleman type so I guess it suits his character more the way you wrote it. All in all, not a bad chapter but a tad short to me. I would've made this one, the previous one and the next one all one chapter but that's just my personal preference lol. Overall well written though. As usual.

Sephi aka Chris Ridgeway here! I see you changed little details, like he ran to the hole instead of just walking to the bathroom. I also feel like I recall him trying to call out to her and then realizing it was useless, guess it makes more sense he'd have long given up on such things. Were the children in the hole before? I dont remember that part in the game. Seems like a rather odd detail and i found it distracting a bit. Ah well. I did find it a good read. Definitely liked it! Good stopping point I guess from a story perspective, but the chapter felt rather short. Just a personal opinion but I probably would have made the chapter end at a later moment. Maybe after her death (Where the demo had ended). Mabe that's an issue I have though, I like to write long chapters lol. (Incidentally, my horror story's chapters are shorter than my other stories do chapters) ah well. Again it was well written and I enjoyed it!

Sephi aka Chris Ridgeway here. Very descriptive, good atmosphere. Well done! Nothing to criticize really. Just a faithful recreation of the moment, with some little added details so far. Prologue definitely set the mood. Let's see where it goes.

Thank you for this adaptation of Silent Hill 4. You did an excellent job capturing the spirit and tone of Silent Hill 4 very well. Most of the combat scenes and a couple of the scenes with adult Walter before the final confrontation could of used some improvement though. But for the most part it was great, even the post game stuff was really well done. Good Job! )

-Summerset Banjo

IIt seems you truly understood the game. As a silent hill fan, I feel deeply into the world that you created in your writings. Im glad you felt empathic towards Walter, he didn't truly know what he was doing.

Not sure if you're around anymore on FF to read this, but I really enjoyed this novelization. It really helped me to understand Henry better, and I loved your portrayal of all of the other characters too. Fantastic work!

I realize that you'll probably never see this comment as it doesn't look like you've been here in fivd years but I just read you silent hill 4 novelization and decided to hunt you down so that I could tell you how excellent it was. You did ond of the best adaptations of a game I've ever read and I read a lot. Thank you

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so far its really good i been reading from the prolough to chapter 8 without a brake is that good. :)

SEQUEL?LOL
I'm a big Henreen fan and I loved how you added Henreen moments through the whole story.
You did a freaking great job.

Well, I just finished this, and let me say as someone who's only managed to get to the first forest level of Silent Hill 4 before having to put it down, I absolutely loved this novelization.

I think I stopped playing both out of fear and frustration. As someone who likes examining every little thing in SH games, it was somewhat annoying and at the same time heightened the tension having ghosts chase me. I'm not demonizing it like many others have, I just don't think it was right for me, at the time. Perhaps after reading this, though, I can give it more of a chance. If I still can't get into it, then there's a wonderfully fleshed out novelization for me to read.

I've always been fascinated by Walter Sullivan, and you wrote him wonderfully. I also like the additions you made to Henry, making him emote more. I can't really speak as to further comparisons to the other characters since I haven't gotten very far in the game, as I said, but everyone was written very well.

My criticisms here are few and far between. I did note that Eileen had a habit of frequently putting her hand on Henry's cheek in a moment of despair or the rare tender moment, and I couldn't tell if it was a writing tic or just the kind of gesture Eileen might do to show affection...

You know, that's really it. That's all I could think of right now. I'm not sure if I'll find something else upon re-reading, which I plan on doing, but...there you go.

But this was excellent work. It's definitely helped inspire me in terms of considering how to write my original Silent Hill story. So thanks for an awesome read.

Show, don't tell. Most of us don't know what it's like to be stuck in a place where there's no escape and no form of meaningful interaction with anything for five days. So put it into detail, the more the better.

On the other hand, I suggest you skimp on the details of the game itself. Most of the people who are reading this are familiar enough with the plot (if not the gameplay) where you don't need to rehash much of it.