I love your continuation of Advent Rising, there were a few spelling and grammatical errors that I caught. Also, from an unnamed source, I have been told that the majority of the second advent rising would mainly be about Marin searching for Gideon, which would mean that she is well a ware that Gideon is not dead this could be written as somebody saying they spotted a human on another planet or she could know from the beginning of the story. Either way I still greatly enjoyed your chapter of Advent Rising

Very good. You kept the atmosphere of the story. You need to increase the chapter length and follow Gideon's story as well because he is alive too. MA

You must Contiue this story.

The Koroem command it!

sweet another advent story, I love them, this is the first one after the game, need more, more, now, fast, need, help me, need my story's, good, more, fast, now... Please?

Your Lord and Master

~Zombie Wolf