okay ending is good

Meh. The story could have been so much more. Good plot, but it read horribly. Why I'd naruto so pathetic? How can a billion dollar business man be so insecure and useless? I get submissive and insecure but this? Makes the story unrealistic. Could have been so much more, even if you kept the chapters just and short and even same teenage essay style. In this case, however, you can't even claim AU or OOC, just kept the names really.

I am a firm believer that if real guys were as hot as they are in anime, there would be no such thing as lesbians. (THIS IS NOT SLANDER! I HAVE NOTHING AGAINST LESBIANS!)

? Umm, okay? I know you say you have nothing against lesbians, but that comment just kinda rubbed me the wrong way I guess. Seems kinda rude.

The Naruto in this story is utterly pathetic. He's the second in command at the company, yet he constantly goes around crying about how useless he is. How the hell did he get to be partner CEO if he has no confidence in his abilities whatsoever? How can he be considered as a leader in the company if he's always needing reassurance that he's doing a good job?

Sakura and Hinata were pathetic in a similar way in the canon manga. At least they had the excuse of being teenagers still learning how to be ninja. This Naruto is an adult professional. He's someone who should have grown out of this obnoxious self-pitying phase years ago.

UH OH!

With suffixes -san is polite. It is used with people you aren't close to. -kun is for people you consider friends. -chan is for people you are exceedingly close to like your closest friend or along those lines. -sama is for people who you are reverent to and it is usually used between a servant and master, the servant being the one using -sama on the master's name. Suffixes aren't really based on gender.

;)

Omg all that sexual tension.

Steamy story! Loved it!

I love when Sasuke is jelous! Thanks!

I will now be on your author page...

i love this fic! 3

takes a pause in reading, well that was anti climatic lol idk what I was expecting but not that, the way you portray Gaara I thought it would take some psychiatric help for a long while before he reached this point (he has some issues... lol) but I guess you are showing the power of naruto hehe

aww poor gaara! even though he is the supposed villain in this fic my heart stil aches for him..
There is of course the fact that I have always thought of gaara/naruto to be the pairing made in heaven!
so even though this is a sasu/naru fic I'll cheer for gaara!

This review is just a bit late, considering I read this fanfic like a month ago... Oops! Anyway, onto the review!
I loved this fic! Seriously, you have talent. This fic had me biting my nails and screaming because it was sooo good!
The characterization was superb... Honestly, I like the OOC, to me it gives the character more depth. Many people would disagree, but whatever.
When I started reading I was bummed that Garra was the bad guy since I really actually like Garra; but as I got through the fic my sadness slowly diminished.
I really loved Naruto's character because in this fic he's not the damsel and distress like in most fics, he's a strong man, who has insecurities like everyone else!
To go along with my previous statement, I love the feelings each character suffered through! I think Garra and Sasuke are portrayed as very emotionless, which is true, but they have feelings just like Naruto, and you did a great job at expressing their emotions...
Argh there is so much more I want to say! I love this fic so much and I hope you continue to share your great talents with those of us who can't really write lol! Thanks for writing this amazing fic. . 3