WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning!
Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lived in a mental
hospital, because she killed her mom and her dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the
staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that best idea was to get rid of her so
they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the
machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died.
Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that reads this letter, on
a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you
and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on this one site, and
she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake. apparently, if you copy and paste
this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life
will either get kissed or asked out, if you break this chain u will see a little dead girl in your room!
CODE RED O!

Hahaha!

Okay.

I'm here to surprise you!

I could tell you what I'm doing...

but I don't want to!

So I'm reviewing without telling you first!

I finally remembered my password...

see?

Oh boy!

You finally updated!

That makes for a very happy Yuki!

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It was a good update though!

Very cute!

Gotta love Varden and Lei'ella!

The ending was cute too.

Out of one fight and into another one...

There's trouble everywhere they go!

!

Okay

That was stupid

Yes?

Yes.

Okay

I'll shut up now then

Great addition!

I'm looking forward to you adding another one!

*strikes you with the lightning bolt of inspiration*

*realizes it was an actual lightning bolt*

*watches as you turn into a pile of quivering ash*

Oops...

*hightails butt outta here*

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wow, I never really thought about that scene in quite that way, but it's true. It was a little short, but I like your writing style enough to forgive you for it ; ). I would love to see you write a few more of these, so please continue!

really good, nicely original, but way too short. please write more! please?

I can put this into seperate reviews.

As a basic reader, I must agree that this was rather short. And it was more towards emotion, not even seeming to touch on the actions that caused this. Perhaps you could throw in a bit of the struggle when he pinned her against the wall. Just so people dont need to refer to comic to remember/understand what happened.

As an Inverloch reader, I enjoyed this a great deal. As soon as you mentioned her slumped on the floor, I remembered the scene and completely understood. You worded the emotion decently, as short as it seemed. And though it doesnt take great length of words to reveal the emotion behind a moment, perhaps a touch of something more would help.

Good luck writing in the future .

That was great...for a start. Very insightful to Varden's POV for that scene, but way, way too short! Write more!

I like Varden, and the reasoning did sound an aweful lot like Varden, but it wasn't exactly a story!

Good work. I think that Inverloch is a great comic too.

Honestly this is really hard to review since not much happens and it feels like it is part of a story and not an actual story in and of itself (which is kind of true since this little piece of writing takes place between two pages of the actuall story). I guess over all it isn't bad even though nothing really happend. Theres just not much else to say about it.

Ahem...

Yay!

I am the first to review!

...I think

So let me use this moment to say:

THAT TOTALLY STANK!

No!

No no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no!

I'm kidding!

I promise I'm kidding!

That was really good!

IT WAS REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY GOOD!

It really was!

And (no offense) I like it better than your story you wrote for English

Anywho

That was really good!

It really was!

I liked it!

Ja!

_~