This was a very interesting idea! Wonderful descriptions and word pace. Great job keeping everyone in character too. And the ending - very nice!

This was pretty amazing. I like your tone/voice seeping through the words!
FAV PARTS:
"I don't do bedtime stories."
Xaldin.
"Um, maybe Axel could come instead - "
"Do you know," he interrupts, "what I used to do to small children who would not sleep when they were told?"
(I can just imagine Saix saying this. Made me laugh so hard.)
I like Zexion's and Demyx's. Well, I like all of them, basically!
I would've portrayed Marluxia a bit more dangerous, but that's just my thinking. I did like the bit about "my little witch", though.
Excellent job!

I've never been a big fan of Namine... I think because I didn't really know what made her different from anyone else. What made her her own character.

This story's starting to change my mind. Fantastic job.

Absolutely amazing :)

this was really good.

The weirdest bedtime songs aren't the ones that come from Demyx.

"There once was a woman from Venu - "

"Axel!"

lol let it not be said that Nobodies lack humor, that and stuffing dusks into larxene's closet

Well, alot of this is jossed by the games... I think. Fun read though. A bit short, but you got there perssonalities right for the most part. Marluxia the psycho, Saix the cold on, Xemnas being... mysterious, Demyx being the fun one, etc.

...Zexion's last line left me curious. Obviously he's hiding something, but could he also be trying to prolong it?

Interesting!

LOVED IT.

You captured the characters perfectly. Such a masterpiece. I'm so impressed! Never stop writing!

It was funny! It was heartbreaking! And it was all in one chapter! Spectacular. You've set the bar very high. :)

HELLO, Luc Court!

I'll do my best to critique on this...okay, where to start...

So...this is sort of what could have been a prequel to Chain of Memories. Okay, what else...hmm...let me try to summarize it before I give the critique. The Organization members practically have to look after Namine, and what better way is there than to tell her a story each night, and make sure she's occupied? I guess each segment tells her expriences with each member, starting with Xigbar and ending with Zexion, excluding Roxas (sort of), probably because he's the newest member of the Organization.

First of all, great character interpretation, which was the key thing throughout the whole fic. I didn't expect the weirdest songs to be from Axel, or Lexeaus to look at water mains. Then again, the way each person is portrayed is different in every person's point of view, so great job. The detail was pretty good, although more could have been added, possibly. My favourite part of this is when Namine asks Zexion about what will happen to her after they run out of stories to tell...it's too bad that she doesn't realize what's going to happen to her next.

Overall, I really enjoyed this, and I can't wait to read some more fics of yours. Keep it up!

-Mystical

Wow. You have an excellent writer's voice! i love how your sentences are poetic and unique. You had a really good idea, too, having them all tell stories to namine. I like how you give them each a different personality, your characterization is really good. love that last bit of humor you fit in there with the umbrella :D

Great work right there. I can't really comment on these types of fanfics, there really nothing to say. Just, gaining knowledge. Knowing what happened where and how, it gives me a small satisfaction. Thank you for your insight.

Unsurprisingly, another introspective and poignant short story with a well conceived study on the characters that are the Organization. Honestly you've become one of my favorite authors, they way you adamantly refrain from having any Nobodies explicitly expressing emotions (or at least refraining from emotional outbursts) but still leaving me with these lingering sentiments are amazing. The concept is adorable, and a childish Namine is, while Canon, not really something I see often portrayed. Where it really shines, however, is the brilliant prose, most of which I dont consider purple tinted. And the last words from Namine as well as Zexion's apathetic wave of the had gave me a whole new perspective on the ruthlessness of the Organization, something-understandably yet unfortunately-ignore by most of the fandom. They're a cruel heartless group after all, and fact that they can nonchalantly spin stories to a little girl they possibly plan on disposing of once she's of no value keeps me thinking. How I wish this was canon :(

I love the way Namine interacts with each of the Organization members. It felt like their characters really came alive from the way you described them. Well done!

Absolutely beautiful! You capture Namine's essence perfectly, and the other characters are well in character. I never thought of Namine as a responsibility of the others, the way even Xemnas has to participate in the drawing of the straws. Very well written, flowing with its own rhythm. I loved it.

I like Axel's story the best.