i love all your digimon stories except the ones where davis dies instead of living happily ever after with kari, anyway how about a new digimon story about davis and kari and their children, just make sure davis lives

Where to begin, alright, you seem to have no concept of satire and political commentary. So much so, that you have stolen the exact same story from the Simpsons, along with the character and completely missed the point it was trying to make. LT. Smash is working for the Navy, he uses pop stars to sing subliminal messages to young kids.

Now, the very fact that the Dudes apparently KNOW that the subliminal messaging is in their video and they aren't even the slightest bit appauled by it is ridiculous.

Next, the parody songs you keep using, Montage, America Fuck Yeah, you don't seem to get that these songs aren't meant to be taken seriously. You should've known that by the fact Slavery is among one of the thing spraised in the song. Its making fun of American action themes. Montage doesn't even make sense in the context given here. Why would kids want a pop band to sing a parody song they didn't even write at one of their concerts.

By the way, only now are the Dudes deciding to write their own stuff. All this time they've been ripping off songs from South Park and other Matt Stone and Trey Parker properties and have been singing them compeltely one hundred percent serious it seems.

The song in this chapter is the most aggregious example, "Pearl Harbour Sucks and I miss you" isn't suppose to be a serious "I miss you" song. Couldn't you have found a better song that was actually about these people missing their girlfriends? It wouldn't have been that difficult. There's plenty. Thios song wouldn't make the girls cry as you claim it would make them laugh, its not a serious song, it shouldn't be treated like one.

I know, this is an old story, but I've checked a good number of your other ones as well, you haven't seemed to have evolved past this point. You contasntly use songs out of approriate context or that don't really work in the desired situation. Worse, far too many of your fics are musicals too point its getting old. You shouldn't rely on songs all the time, they don't add anything they just make these chapters look longer then they should. In other words its padding.

Also, songfics are against the rules on . I should know, one of mine was removed for that purpose. Even then though that songfic wasn't so much a musical as it was making fun of them. You seem to take these songs way too seriously, more then you should it hurts these stories overall.

My advice, stop making musicals and just rely on your own writing talents. This isn't helping you become a better writer its distracting you from it. Work on your own style, don't take from others.

GR

Mykan, some fool MSTed this!

They r only on the first chapter, maybe ucould find a way to stop them?

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this is a really cute fic! loved it and i love the song!

love it

Heh. You had fun with the little song at the end, eh? A little ego-boo's a nice way to finish a story, I think!

Hmph, I never like that Totally Spies show... Anyway, Nice chapter man, way to pull up the cute fluff can't wait to read more

GREAT STORY!

A condom would be a fun present... *grins*

Great story! Hope you update more soon.

Cute! Hey, where'd that Pearl Harbor song come from? It sounds funny...

Well... the scene with Angewomon and ExVeemon was kinda cute. I'm sorry, I just can't get behind the 'join the navy' thing though. Pacifist Canadian, you know...

Ha! You go guys, that Simpson's ephiode is one of my favorites man way to use it for the Digi-dudes! Keep it up!

Awesome Dude that was a sweet chapter. I love how the boys are so sweet never letting anyone forget they're taken. I hope someday Mimi finds that courage it'd be awesome if she could get in it... who knows maybe you could move Matt I mean the Digi-dudes are where it's at! It sucks you couldn't put N'sync in... that'd been awesome! Keep it up Man!

I'm not going to lie to you...you've improved quite a bit. You still have ways to go, but good job nevertheless.