This a nice first chapter! It kept my attention and is super cool :]

You sound like a host on a talk show :)

Omg! That was sooooo good! The ending was really cyute! I wonder where daddy went! Nyufufufu!

I LOVE THE CHAPTER NAMES WERE THE LYRICS TO SHIMMY SHIMMY QUARTER TURN! That is one of my all time favorite songssss! Woooo

ah!

they are finally together! happy happy!

:) good job!

how i adore this story :)

I totally know what you mean about the LOTR game. Stupid Frodo. I've been getting as far as the sewers, and then I die and pretty much have to start all over again. But seriously, big winged thing comes flying at you and you run! How is that difficult to comprehend? Anyway, great story.

hi i love your story so far i just finished your other story echo(i even ditched homework to read it sorry i didnt review i will do it laer kay)

even though you complain about suisidal(i cant spell sorry)plot bunnies, bad humor and crap ideas i like them (i have a tendancy to laugh my insides out at things others dont find funny)i find them very oringnal and you should give yourself a pat on the back

i seriously in enjoyed your stories so far i even fell off my bed iterially at your lines. i'm so glad i found your proflie i cant find a good author whos dedicated to kingdom hearts i love the series and all the characters especially Axel, Roxas Sora and Riku

hehe i love the personality you gave Roxas the cuddly toy addiction i found it cute (plus i also happen to be like this aswell)

i so really hope you make more sories their AWSOME so dont take any crap about the oxygen stealers that nab/down your work coz they anin worth it ..seriously they anint

oh i and if you dont mind can you help me around the site am new so i anint very good at stuff like uploading(technonlgy hates me)-_-# i have used the site as a guest thingy person just not as a member

i better stop my ranting ...i even wonder you made this far well thanks for your stories they have my day

Whew finally found this story again haha i had read it years ago and i finally found it again to read lol XD, really a nice peice of work, this was awsome!

lmao im sorry, but the description of what Axel put on earlier and the fact that he is trailing/following what seems like a cute couple on a date at the mall makes it seem as though Axel is going to get "in trouble" for being some sort of creepy stalker/pedo dude.

HAHAHA! XD i love Axel and his awesomeness.

I LOVE THIS STORY! ;D im becoming a fan of ur stories u betta update! or ill be grumpy more more more chapters D:

Cute. Really cute! I love this first chapter, and I'm going to read the rest!

(But I reviewed this first chapter because you asked who made up Akuroku...it's actually parts of their names. Akuseru and Rokusasu are the Japanese spellings, because they don't use L or X. So Aku plus Roku (equals true love)!)

very nice!

continue if there is anything to continue?

aww..so sweet..think i'll go crazy a while..-runs away n shouts n screams heard-

except that i'm still curious about axel's father..hm, where did he go..? well, at least i hope he admit defeat..(like hell he would! pfhh..) or maybe he just die..hahaha~

Ehmagawd, that was brilliant.

Leah x

Brilliant story and it was really funny .