"he didn't want to breath" - breathe Twice. In two sentences.

"He sit on his chest" no clue. Sat? Would sit?

"lair lair" - liar liar. "A pitiable site". Come on. Really? This is just getting tedious. I've forgotten what the story is about, there are so MANY screw ups in here.

Sorry, but this one just doesn't make sense, even without all the bloopers. Overwrought imagery, lack of explanation - who got shot at the end? This is one for the reject pile. I realize this is fanfiction dot net, but if you are going to write something - even a grocery list - you should use the correct words!

Wait. He ran into the guy's rock hard gut at the end of the last chapter, now he's slipping through the curtains?

"strut off the porch step" - strutted?

"slammed on the breaks" - what broke? Oh, BRAKES! Sigh.

"I rather be castrated" - I'd

"It would be on hell" - one

"escape rout" - route

What other gun? Huh? I'm lost.

"far too quite" - quiet again.

"this is just a though" then "so I though" - thought.

"quant" - quaint

"though entryway" - though the

"mahogani" - mahogany?

"pistil loving maniac" - pistol? Context doesn't work?

Darkwing says whore? And demons wouldn't, not would...

"who's dark read shirt" - whose

"anything but quite" - quiet

"bowls" - bowels

"sturn" stern? Lots of puncutation/spacing problems. Liking the story.

good development, but I think the ending is a strange thing ... as many loose ends to leave there and here ... could be arranged ... I laughed a lot. overall I like, despite the strange final

Great story. Loved it. Hope you make more similar to it. One thing though. I was left wondering a things though:

What happened to Negaduck, Lanton, Tiffy and that house?

Is that Drake/Darkwing or Drake/Negaduck that survived and went home to Goslin and Launchpad?

Who fired the gun? Negaduck? Darkwing? or Lanton?

Apart from leaving the answer to those things up in the air... I loved it :D

omg what a good story ! but if negaduck had his chainsaw i am sure he would have chopped lanton in a thousand pieces XD

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"I KNEW you wouldn't notice the enormous flag"

Okay, I apologise in advance if this review is posted twice...I wrote you this long-ass one and then tells me it had an error processing my request...I'll give them error...just kidding...

Anyway...I"m really glad I stumbled across this fic, I was completely glued to the screen the whole time. Always having been a fan of DW and Negs, I was seriously intrigued by this story. It was so STRONG. I really appreciate the fact that you toyed with traditional narrative techniques, your storytelling abilities are awesome. Your imagery is also topnotch - you know how to create a scene. Sometimes things get a little verbose, but I can't talk as I do the same thing.

I love the interactions between the two Drakes. You really created something unique with these characters. My favorite thing had to be the dialogue - very intense and natural. While I thought there should have been more closure on Negs' behalf (that's just personal bias), I really found it interesting that you ended the story where it begun. The whole thing was so weird and unsettling - greatness. Thanks for providing me with such an interesting read!

I'm so confused. Question: What the Sam Hill happened at Lanton's? DW and LP aren't...yeah, that's just sick. But what in the world happened to Negs?

This...is weird...but somehow intriguing...so onward I read.

Interresting. I'm a little curious as to what is going on with Drake, but I guess time will tell...

I trully loved this story! Well written, and well thought out! That's how Darkwing and Lord Negaduck would react to each other if they were locked in the same room!

Yes, I do have quite a collection of Darkwing Duck stuff-but there is no Lord Negaduck collectibles!

Always love the Lord Negaduck and Darkwing Duck stories! I always can't wait for another author to write a Negaduck story!

Another Great Chapter, loved the body slam Lanton gave Lord Negaduck!

Can't wait to find out how the twins are going to get out of this predictiment.