Ah im still reading, its pretty good so far, love that keisuke is trying to get naruto and hinata together, tho with naruto being dense i know its going to take a while, but still!

Eh i actually liked the thought of keisuke coming along but the hyuga woman not so much

Una intensa pelea. Me gusta

Confuso episodio. saludos

I almost laughed aloud with horror at the thought of Naruto actually throwing money at Hinata. that is a HUGE disaster waiting to happen

Alas I fear that you have fallen into the one category of fanfiction I don’t read, OC driven stories. Personally I hate stories that are about or for the OCs. I feel that if the need to be in a story they should be accents to the story you are painting not part of the main focus.

Thethirdfang has an amazing example of this his OCs are supper prevelant but they add to the character story shown. Keisuke and harukas journey is a focal point for this one. Overall good writing though.

To be honest, i didn't expect much from this story when i clicked on it but it is just amazing loved it

Fascinating start.

The Konoha in your story is inept. I thought Naruto was being shadowed by Anbu? And they let their equivalent of a weapon of mass destruction be beaten around like that? And shouldn't the competent shinobi know the difference between the demon and its jailer?

Sayonara is said to someone you're not expecting to see or even never to see again. As in, it's the goodbye you say to a person moving away and never seeing again in the foreseeable future or even to someone who's use Ja or Ja Ne.

This has been one of the most incredible Naruto stories I have ever read. There were so many twists and turns and don't even get me started one the original characters; Keisuke and Haruka are such a great team! I can't wait to start reading the sequel! Excellent job!

C-sama ;3

Have I mentioned yet that I love the concept of the Reiude? Because I do. Imma yoink it.

Gai DYNAMICALLY pretending not to be able to swim. Simply awesome. Eheheheheh.

You know, I clicked on this, not sure how much to expect from it. But I was completely sucked in. And man, can I say, I rarely like oc's so much as yours. I've *never* liked oc's so much I ship them!

Looking forward to reading your sequel as I have time!

That was bad*ss. I loved Hinata and Naruto's sync'd fight.