Great. Fic. I love it.

~Caity :)

Awww, that was so sweetly beautiful! I LOVED it!

Wonderful story! I read this a few years ago, in a place where I could log in, and I've been searching for this story ever since!

So sad that it took them so long to finally make peace, but at least they're 'friends' again now. Thanks for sharing this!

Sniff sniff

Now you made me cry!

Well done, well done!

A wonderful story!

Beautiful, brilliant, heart-warming... need I say more?

Loved your story!

It's beautiful!

Luna

I like it!

Wow! It took then EIGHT YEARS to figure this out! AWESOME! :D

How dare you make me cry like that! It's so not fair for a fan like me who loves sweet Narnia, fluffly, brother fic. Now I can't function with my duties of real life because of the tears and...and thoughts of how Peter and Edmund finally revealed their love for one another.

I guess I should tell you I absolutely love your writing so I will. I loved everything about it, the style the flow, the confessions,and the ease at their willingness to hug each other without the typical discomfort of touching another male. I mean really, they are brothers and there should be no shame between brothers. This is just an AMAZING piece of writing, and C.S. Lewis would be proud of what you have done to strengthen his characters.

Rolletti

This is so so sweet. I love how much they care about each other! _

Your writing is absolutely wonderful, by the way!

KYA! ABSOLUTELY GORGEOUS! yeah. so i found your other edmund peter fics and they are a delight to read, let me tell you. _ so beautiful, just so beautiful.

thank you for some great reading!

Edmund/Peter brotherly love? Just what I needed today. Seriously. :)

I think your narration is amazing. It's fluent, it's SLOW (it doesn't move from idea to idea without fully explaining and transitioning, which is vital), and it's beautifully presented. Your sentences are strongly arranged and full of rarely-repeated words. Clearly some top-level stuff.

But your dialogue seems a bit stilted when you get to Peter's "I love you" line. I just don't think Peter should blurt that out without more of a build-up. I was expecting the brothers to argue, to discuss, to converse - anything, really. I just thought you would make that work a bit more fully there. (I do think Peter's the type to blurt it out, but it needs to be worked up to a little. Y'know what I mean?)

I also think that some of the words you use are just not the right ones for this, even taking their maturity into account. "My beloved brother" sounds like it's from the front of a Hallmark card. "Giving wholly of oneself" sounds more Biblical than anything, and not something an eighteen-year-old would say. "Perhaps it is wrong to place any human on a pedestal" is a truly lovely thought, and correct for Edmund to say, think of, and defend. But you present it oddly with your choice of phrasing.

I do love Edmund's broken, crying dialogue. I love Ed's role reversal, and when he becomes the protector, I love this reassurances to Peter. The spirit of all of your dialogue, indeed, is right there, every step of the way.

I love Peter's end kiss (aww!), and Peter's refusal to be seen as a hero. The choice to have the sisters visit Ed, Peter's tucking in, and the circumstances of Edmund's wound are all wonderful.

In short, every action, nearly every narrative comment (I think Peter can go a little more overboard worrying and responding to Ed's wound), and the plot are all beautiful. I enjoyed every second of it. If you can clean up the dialogue to make it sound more natural, I'll believe it a whole lot more, and it will make this piece perfection. ;)

Superb work!

Keep writing.

OOH! Brotherly fluff is awesome! This is absolutely adorable, and Edmund is my favorite out of the Pevensies! I have to ask something though: was that sickness/illness (whatever it was) that Edmund got twice made up for the purpose of this fic only, or to be extended on later? Because, personally, I think it should be extended on, and I suppose it could be this fic's companion piece, or the other way around. But please extend on it? There's so many things I'd like to know about it, and I'd utterly butcher it if I even tried to write it.

Great story, very sweet good for both of them.