Now that I'm done wiping my eyes, let me thank you for your beautiful "apology to Susan", though I think you have nothing to apologize for. And I want to say that when reading or listening to books, the stories are not the creation of the author alone, for books and audio push us to make the image/experience in our minds - we join with and become the characters in a way that is far more powerful than watching a movie, in which you are an outside observer, not one with the characters. Our powerful feelings of rejection of Susan's fate are the essence of that co-creative act of story, we have become Susan and know those harsh lines are not true to who she was. I remember as a child clinging to the promise that she still lived, and would surely be touched by the loss of her family and maybe find Aslan again as he was in her own country; you went even farther and wrote out your inner truth of who Susan was and how she would get through. And apparently, Jack himself, thought that readers wanting to write their own endings was one of the best possible outcomes to his tales. Well done, dear one!

Sometimes a story leaves you without words for a review. This is one of those stories.

This was just amazing. I had always wondered if Susan would ever fund her way back to Narnia. And as someone who relates to Susan more than Lucy, I felt that being only left with Peter's brief commentary in The Last Battle was perhaps not enough on which to base our final judgement of her.

This will totally inspire me my own "susan of narnia" thanks

the best

It's so sad aw but it's really good

Exquisite. Just exquisite. Susan has ever and always been my least favorite of the Pevensies, and yet, she is the one whom my mind revolves around the most. Largely for the reasons detailed in this fic. Beautifully, beautifully done. Brava.

wow. that was very powerful, very stiking. It really grabs you. it makes you feel everything writing should. Really great use of words, I could tell you chose each one carefully. Very simple and straight forward, no unnecessary words clogging the page. Really awesome job:)

I, too, wish Lewis would've finished Su's story, but I can't help but think of the line from Superchick's "We Live": If I could have the time back, how I'd live
Life is such a gift
So how does the story end?
Well, this is your story and it all depends
So don't let it become true
Get out and do what we were meant to do

As in, it's kind of implied, but it's for us to decide. It's like Su's story is our story, and we need to decide how it will end.
If that makes any sense.

Anyway. This is really, really well-written and emotional and...just great. I love Susan's thoughts here, about not being dear to Aslan. I think everyone feels that way on occasion, that we're not worthy of love - from anyone, let alone from God. \ But that's not true. We are His Dear Ones, just like Su realizes in the end. :)

Wow...

I WISH Lewis would have finished Su's story. I wish he would have told us whether she found Narnia again, though I think he thinks she will. _

The end of LB upset me as well. I identify with Su the most as well, other than Lucy (I'm somewhat of a split of the two), so it was hard for me to accept that Susan wasn't there in New Narnia, that she was left alone and would questionably get there. So, Lewis really didn't mean Peter's words to be her fate? It was just the opinion of the Kings and Queens, then?

This whole story focusing on Lucy's being the 'dear one' was gorgeous. U It was so sad, but so sweet because Susan realizes she is also his dear one, no matter that Lucy has kept the faith always and Su has drifted.

It was poignant, for me, that Susan got rid of everyone else's things, but couldn't bear to part with Lu's just yet.

This entire, inner battle with Aslan's voice really did get me. I had tears in my eyes a good many times, especially when Aslan spoke, Su was crying, afraid, and then, at peace. Goodness, the part with her siblings perhaps knowing they would die, too...gosh, that definitely struck a chord! ...Do you think they knew, somehow?

The beauty of this piece is unspeakable. I adore it to an almost insane extent, and I cannot thank you enough for writing this! The quote at the beginning is EXACTLY fitting! *U* *U* *U*

Ever-so sincerely signed,

Shizuku Tsukishima749 :D ;D :) ;)

I always felt that The Last Battle ended in a hope note for Susan, as though she would suffer the loss of her family and that would snap her out of her daze and realize that she had been leading a plastic and unreal life and thus, she would return to Aslan, but the neveranswering question for me was how...

I really liked this way; Susan realizing that she is indeed loved by Aslan and that not only Lucy was His dear one.

I read this a while ago, but I decided to come back and leave a review because it's so beautiful.

I really really love this! Some of the things Aslan said made me shiver: "Sometimes, I am answer enough" and "Then you will reach for me, and it will be better than it ever was before."

Thanks for writing this! :)

I LOVED this story of yours.

Mayhaps I should start by saying that the afore mentioned fact surprised me: I typically detest Susan-centric stories, finding that she is either too stubborn, or too stiff in comparison to her brothers and sister, or even because of her faltering in the Last Battle.

After reading your story, I'm wondering why I ever allowed myself to think like that.

"Echoes of Tomorrow" is a beautiful and hopeful story, tracing the afterthought of Susan Pevensie with the grace that truly befits her Creator.

In sampling your work, I realized that I have committed an inane act: to sneer at another for a wrong I myself have often fallen prey to.

I know only too well, that gentle, commanding whisper that is constant, and so sensibly strong in its voicing of matters. You excelled brilliantly at capturing the essence of that still, small voice- even to the point where I felt that it was speaking to ME.

Gorgeously written and clearly supported by a true belief in redemption from steadfast love.

I hope to see more from you!

As Always,

-Tonzura123

Oh, goodness. This piece... it brought actual tears to my eyes. And though I often feel so full when reading that I wish I COULD cry, I never do. But this!

It was sad, perhaps because Susan's thoughts and emotions were so familiar - that was this story's heartbreaking charm, I think. I could FEEL Susan's pain and grief, and I understood her own selfish desire to be called Dear One. She was the one who had worked so hard to be good, who DESERVED that benediction; but Lucy danced through life so easily and had it bestowed upon her like a gift.

And yet, with all of that, Susan didn't recognize that she WAS Aslan's dear one too, and... oh, it was lovely.

I've always thought C.S. Lewis was rather hard on Susan; yes, it isn't right to become silly and conceited, or to forget Aslan, but to have your entire family taken away - to be so alone - Susan's fate broke my heart, and I was rather angry with him (Lewis) for a time. Reading this brought some wonderful closure.

Thanks for a lovely, lovely piece.

"Oh, dear girl, why do you find it so difficult to believe that you do not have to try so hard to be good? Is it so impossible that I could be good enough for both of us?"

All right, so that's where I broke down.

I don't think I've ever more related to Susan. I know that He loves me; but somehow I get the impression that I have to do more things for Him to love me as much as He loves others. This was a much-needed reminder.