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OMG BEST STORY EVER! Thanks for updating!

OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG that was AWESOME! I can't wait to read what happens next! Also, thanks for updating.

I don't care if it's liked by multiple people, or if I'm the only person who likes it. Just extend it and stop torturing your awesome readers!

i am very interested to see where this goes and am happy to find a well written shadow series fic.

It's about time you updated! It's been THREE YEARS since you published this! I liked this chapter and want more!

WRITE MORE CHAPTERS WRITE MORE CHAPTERS WRITE MORE CHAPTERS PLEASE! DON'T KEEP ME IN SUSPENSE! THAT WOULD BE CRUEL!

It was a little too fast paced for my liking, there should have been a little more space after she kills Achilles. I would also have found it a little more credible if she had killed him the way she attacks him in the book. You need to put a little more time into explaining things and perhaps a little of petra's character rather than just all-out action. Also there's quite a few typos you could have fixed. I also didn't like the fact that you wrote it in the present tense, but that's just me.

I do like the concept however and I liked some little phrases such as "Petra freezes like a deer caught in the headlights". Keep writing!

my only complaints with this are gramatical and such. a couple typos, a couple awkwardly worded phrases, and a couple tense mix-ups. nothing too major though. the kind of thing id do actually.

but very interesting concept. id like to see what you can do with this. keep writing!

~Silver