Huh. That's an interesting way to set up the birth of Mammon. This isn't bad, so if you ever come around again, it would be cool to see it start back up.

i like your story, but i have no idea what is going on because i have yet to beat the game. i can't get past Zelse, but my HP is 140 and i have 35 MP. i don't know my other stats, but i am currently training in the woods where Zelse is. any suggestions to beat the game will be welcome. but i hope that you continue with this, it is very good.

Chapter 1 ~ I was simply amazed by the brilliance and strength of your words and symbolizations... As well, the story started off amazingly well, gripping to the very end. I was wondering how well your fanfic would be, and having now read it, I am glad I did. Great work! n_n

Chapter 2 ~ You provide a very good background to what is happening now and was happening in the past, as well, you have created a brilliant induction of new ideas and item use. Everything you did was superb, and once again, very gripping. Two thumbs up, hell, it'd be three if I had that many thumbs!

Chapter 3 ~ You did a decent job of bringing in the new character, but I would like to see some better transition. Your descriptions, as they were in the last two chapters, were great, and impressed me every time. Not only have you brought a great insight to what 'Quest 2' may have been, but the plot isn't all rainbows and pillows, as is seen in the descriptions of how history has been forgotten, and how Brians' trials would never be given the recognition they truly deserved. n_n

All in all, I envy your great abilities... Maybe I could learn a thing or two from reading from your style.