Excellent work. You have captured the spirit of Eric Draven exactly. I'm guessing the title is from the comic "The crow said don't look" or The Cure's song Burn "'Don't look, don't look' the shadows breathe"

Again, very moving!

This is a beautiful story, and a wonderful rendering of Eric's character. I like the similarity in writing styles to the comic, very elegant and natural.

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This is an amazing story, so detailed and full of emotion. You have a gift there, your writing.