| Reviews for Potter no more |
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   Vampireking40 chapter 3 . 11/28/2018 So he meets Hermione not knowing she is like him. So what happens next. |
| Cate chapter 3 . 6/21/2016 I now hate Hermione's dad. He doesn't think to realize that maybe she wasn't annoying someone. |
| Rafaxadrez chapter 3 . 6/6/2016 Very good Continue |
| Guest chapter 3 . 6/26/2015 Please update soon |
| SnowWolf43 chapter 3 . 1/8/2015 Why are you stoping here |
| Lord Revan Flame chapter 3 . 2/23/2014 This is so awesome I need more! |
| Guest chapter 3 . 1/27/2014 can u please hurry up and write some more of this story i really want 2 know what is going 2 happen next |
| H chapter 2 . 1/3/2014 Why would James treat Harry that way and not Dan as well? |
| Guest chapter 3 . 10/9/2013 Update |
| Guest chapter 3 . 6/29/2013 this is cool keep this story goung |
| Firewarrior123X chapter 3 . 5/22/2013 I like the harryxhermionie paring :) |
| blaleblelelel chapter 3 . 10/5/2011 can't wait to read the next chapter . |
| Vickie1996 chapter 2 . 10/2/2011 Hey ... I've read your story and re read it and wanted to give you some helpful critisism even if your not continuing the story. Don't hate me .. I think you need to review your writing. I understand that you have a style that mainly uses dialogoue but it's just not enough. Also, the way the characters speak and say stuff ... it's just not natural. In fact, it's a bit boring. Don't get me wrong, I really love the plot. It has so much potential and I get you haven't updated in ages but I guess this is just one of my quirks. Anyway, I believe if you do continue or think about re-writing it, you should consider more description and more natural dialogue. (Not just the words spoken but what happens between the words. For example - "What happened with Harry today?" "He broke Kerry's ornament so I punished him," "It was an accident James ..." Okay, in them lines I want to know how James is feeling. Is he hesitant about saying this to Remus. Is he confident that Remus will respond kindly to his way of thinking ... do you understand what I'm saying? Also, I believe the plot is moving alarmingly quickly. I mean, focussing on chapter 2, why don't we hear of Remus previously wanting to take Harry away. It's just moved too quickly. Surely Remus would have had an inkling of what was going on before. Like I said before, I love the potential the plot has, but I think you've gone about writing it in a not so great way. I'm sure if you re-write it could be amazing. I'm sorry if you can't take critisism but that is my opinion. Great idea ... Vickie1996 |
| Caroline the Poet chapter 3 . 7/10/2011 I really like this story I hope you update soon! |
| e the time keeper chapter 3 . 3/12/2011 update? |
