Nnguh.

The way you describe all these metaphorical.. abstract awesomeness..

I wanna say it's beautiful. Is that okay? Oh well. 'Cause it is. To me- a word nerd.

So yes.. it was very nice and I enjoyed it. :]

Just wanted to let you know that I think this story is brilliant. I was reading it, and there were gems that fell out and wow-ed me. I especially loved the way you managed to use the idea of trains and tracks. The tone you employed was beautiful and languid all at once.

Great work! :D

*Jaw drops in utter disbelief anyone could write this good*

Another beautiful piece. Thought provoking and emotionally charged, I like the fast paced, tumbling-downhill-towards-something feel to this, as well as the poetic quality it contains. Your writing is intelligent as well as beautiful and I look forward to reading the rest of your stories here!

Perfect. Honestly amazing.

Because a set of apple—yes apple—red eyes promised him something he cannot quite remember.

The whole fic is good, but this line is what makes it great.

This is perhaps the best stream-of-consciousness Saiyuki fic I've read. I enjoyed the metaphore of tracks almost as much as the deft ways in which you managed to keep it from becoming overpowering. Your use of poetic repetition as well as returning phrases lent both an eloquence and a reality to the thoughts on Hakkai's mind. Even so, my favorite line is unquestionably the last; for with that line, the fourth wall is gently pressed and the author let in on the fact that the character suspects his pain and his choices and his fate are never entirely his own. Truly lovely. Thank you.

the imagery here is beautiful. not so much without tracks, but also a never ending inward spiral but there may be light at the long dark tunnel end of it all ne? a red one perhaps.

ooh, that was very good. i liked it a lot, a lot, a lot. you wrote hakkai very well. nice fic!

Oh my goodness...I got the chills reading this (don't know why). Anyway, your writing is just...I don't know how else to put it...awesome! Just awesome. It's so deep and meaningful to me. Please, please, please keep writing!

Wow! This is really good, I'm very impressed (as I always am by your work, but anyway...)

I love the imagery you create in this fic, especially the train, and the blood-red curtain; I love the repetition of ideas at times (something he can't remember, and how he gets terribly, terribly tired of sunsets were my favourites) and the way the trains of thought carry through.

I am definitely adding this to my favourite story list. Thankyousoveryverymuch for this beautiful story. Love you.