It's been years but where ever you are good story yours was one of the first I read and got me into fanfiction as well as helped me through a deployment maybe one day you will come back. Cheers and god speed where ever you are

So I got to chapter 3, and I am effectively lost.
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Did you do that on purpose?

Man this fanfiction complety lost me ..
I don't understand how Harry come to be laying in his bed with Tonks to dueling with Voldy...
And why Tonks come in the clothe shop ?

Man in one of those fanfic I really want Harry to have it with Fate !
Shag her senseless, make her cry out his name until she collapse !

this is awesome

Hrm, just realized that this was my second time reading this story and that I hadn't even left a review.

I really did enjoy this story (hence, reading it more than once). Grammar's good for the most part. Story's coherent. The latter half of the story seems to be a bit rushed. Section breaks would do wonders for when you switch POV's between Harry, Kyoto, and Baretta. Other than that, I just loved the plot. (Ginny disemboweling herself on the dinner table had absolutely nothing to do with it.)

Pay no mind the butt-hurt slash fappers out there, who are disappointed by you staging Blaise as female.

Thanks for the enjoyable read.

Blaise Zabini is a GUY.

Why does no one know this.

What kind of girl is named Blaise! No offense, but the story is a little bit (a VERY LARGE bit) confusing. I like the idea though. Anyway, I don't blame you for the mix-up. About 40% of all Harry Potter fans think Blaise Zabini is a girl.

Realmente ese personaje kyoto es una basura, es estúpido, no pudiste ponerle un nombre más ridículo verdad? Y lo peor es qué lo emparejas con la mamá de blaise. Realmente eres un retardado ojala reescribieras esta historia sin esa tontera de kioto.

you know? This story could have been the best story in the whole fanfiction world

had it not been for the OCs i am really trying to finish reading this story but i just can't stand all the oc part, they are very lame oc. Lamento decirte que la cagaste con ese kyoto compadre. Realmente esas partes son aburridosimas

Very good chapter.

gunny

Very good chapter.

gunny

Very good chapter.

gunny

Very interesting start.

gunny

? confused here, the story cant be over, its to open i want to know whats going to happen next. but apart from that thanks for a lovely story, if not a bit confusing at times.

good story sequel looks good and keep writing.