the only thing so far is you didn't begin it like all the episodes began when they were on the air with bulletproof starting off sayin the case of something c.o.p.s. file # something then says some stuff and then here's how the caper went down or something like that

I'm working on a sort of Crossover-ish type fic of my own that includes the Cartoon C.O.P.S. (Central Organization of Police Specialists) and Robocop of the 80s which had the cartoon that was made by Marvel. I could use your help in that in creating ideas and such for my story. My Fic parallels most of the main events of the Robocop film until reaching a plot twist at the middle. I intend to include all the familers charictors from The Show C.O.P.S.

by the way cool fic

This story is awesome. For years I thought I was the Only person that remembered this awesome show, and I'm glad that someone out there wrote a great fanfic. Please write more in this genre. 4 1/2 stars

Interesting beginning. Nice first-person account. You have the past tense done very well. A lot of writers get the past mixed up with the present and can create much angst for the reader! :0)

However, there was one instant where you did do a present tense word and it's right after the first line. 'I took a harsh breath, like I've been keeping it in too long...' Hmm - it's possible you might be correct in that, but if you follow the rest of that paragraph, the remaining tense is in the past format. So, maybe it could have read as 'I took a harsh breath, like I had been keeping it in too long...'

Also, I've found that 'like' is a one-word cliche for 'as if'. I just discovered that, my self, recently, so my earlier works will be riddled with this word. I have MS Word Document and it has under Tools a check for Spelling and Grammar and a host of other aspects to writing, such as 'fragmented sentences', run-ons, etc. It helps me to catch quite a few nuances of this nature. Sometimes, writing is like 'standing so close to the tress, you can't see the forest.' LOL

I'm not at all familiar with this particular fandom called COPS, so I cannot comment on whether or not your OC fits in. Just the same, I'm intrigued that you wrote him with cerebral palsy. Would this person just have the markings of the disease on his genetics or is he suffering from the physical manifestations? If the latter, then I find it even more intriguing, and I have to admit to a bit of disbelief, that as an actor, he is placed in romantic rolls. Not that I feel those with this malady cannot perform as such, but Hollywood, being what it is (and my family's been in that biz for decades), the physical portrayal of any character is usually paramount (no pun intended) to the person's acting ability. In a perfect world, afflictions would not and should not matter, but - alas - this is not a perfect world. Michael J Fox even had to retire himself, with limited cameos and acting engagements, because he understood the insecurities of this industry.

Well, forgive my rambling, but it was one aspect of your story that sort of stood out with me. It left me wondering if you added that only because of your own personal relationship with it, maybe through a loved one or a close friend? Sometimes, we writers do add aspects of ourselves or others that we know, into our musings - which is not as uncommon as we'd like to believe. Which, of course, makes me wonder a great deal about Stephen King! LOL

Obviously, by this review and the fact that it refers to the first chapter, I have a ways to go in reading the story itself. With that said, it is quite likely that my questions will be answered in due time.

Consequently, it looks like I have some more reading to do.

All the way around, though, it was a nice piece and well written.

Oh, and btw, reinbeauchaser has nothing to do with any German influence, although my husband is a second generation German-American. I love rainbows, but rainbowchaser was already taken. My dad once owned an Arabian/Saddlebred horse that he named Reinbeau, so I adopted that moniker and added chaser. I even have a picture of an inverted rainbow, taken up near Yosemite Nat'l Park. In addition, I've seen triple rainbows - in Montana, to be specific. Certainly, one of God's most amazing creations!

Well, that's about it from me. Sorry for the length; sometimes when I get writing, it's hard to stop! LOL

In the meantime, be blessed.

sorry I'm not very good at writing fanfiction,even though I do have a good imagination. but I do look forward to your next story.

wow Bulletproof was pissed lol,great chapter I look forward to the next one.

yeah I can also guess how Bulletproof's reaction's going to be,as well as the others.

I look forward to it,and I'ld like to know where that fansite is you were talking about. my e-mail's squad110

about time they put a place for COPS here,I liked it.

It's been a while since i saw that show and im glad some decided to make a fic out of it, The only Charictors i liked from that Show Was Button McBoomBoom which im using in my Batman Fic, Read it if ya want, but leave a review as well please _