At least Happosai died.

I am sorry but when you just end with a name this feels more like your writing a play instead of a story I tried to get through this but I just can't with the way that it was written.

Should have had Nodoka over hear what Ranma said after breaking the kiss with Ukyo

I like this story if you decide to write one with a slight alteration here is an idea instead of curing Akane's curse they set up a real identity for the curse side and have Ranma's girl side marry Akane's male side and Ranma's male side marry Nabiki

Interesting story and definitely one of the unique ranma stories!

I think yu should have had some instant Nannichuan with the ultra sound photos

Ok I am confused because
Ranma was in tub Nabiki joined him they kissed then the next night Akane joined him in the tub where they kiss then afterwards Kasumi says to them that Akane & Nabiki could be pregnant & that's where I am confused because you don't say anything about them having sex so it makes Kasumi sound like she thinks you get pregnant by kissing

As Shampoo would say: "too too weird."

Absolutely incredible idea and story I like the unique plot good job!

good story ne

I love how you protrayed Nodoka instead of having her be like she is in 90% of the Fanfics where either she wants Ranma to marry Akane & then take Kasumi, Nabiki, Ukyo, Shampoo & Kodachi as mistresses or she wants Ranma to marry the girl he loves (Ranma 1/2, Original Character or Crossover girl) then take the others as mistresses & I thought you should had the following in the last bit of the chapter

Ranma noticed a box under the tree & said "Wait there's one more present "To Akane & Nabiki from Cologne, Shampoo & Mousse"" he then handed it to his wives while keeping the letter as they opened the package he read the letter

Dear Ranma

Thank you for your help with killing Happosai, in thanks for your help both your forms & your wives are now members of the tribe.

Cologne

P.S I'm sorry to hear about the lost of your child & hope our gift for your wives will help in the future.

"Oh My" they chorused "What?" Nabiki handed the box back to Ranma when he looked inside he saw several bars of Waterproof Soap and several packets of Instant Nannichuan then blushed at the implications of what that ment.

that was a great story!

it's moko takabisha-do your homework.

um... putting the persons name after the sentance is lazy and makes the writing seem hasty and sloppy, more detail is required. sorry but truth is truth.

uh...it seems like a good story, but i can't concentrate...what with naming who said what thingie you did. feels as if i'm reading a script. you're dialogues are nice, but instead of putting names into it...you could put it into context. add some descriptions and stuff. sorry, not trying to flame you or anything..it's just that the thing you do with dialogue really put me off the story.