I will just pretend this was abandonded at chapter 15.

This is painful to read with little use of comma and periods

Really a great story. Very original though the change of pace at Chapter 16 left so many unanswered questions. Too great a transition to really flow naturally.
IMHO it would almost have been better to end the story at Chapter 15 and then start Chapter 16 as a sequel and go from there. The loss of memory by machinations of Dumbledork (Hate? Too strong a word, loathe is more appropriate. I loathed him in canon and that hasn't changed in fanfic.) and then a house elf (that too conveniently dies) leaves a bad taste.
Also, the relationship between Harry and Hermione just leaves much to be desired. It is like some dark aspect of "50 First Dates".
So, yes, I like the story. I would like to read more. If for no other reason than to try to grasp the entire concept you had in mind when writing.

This is ridiculous. The whole fic just jumped the shark.

Fuck. It was going so well, and then all the notes and replies show up.

Some very interesting and confusing twists to the story...

Keep writing as life allows

Unusual chapter especially since Neville's gran died in the previous chapter...

WHAT?! Without any lead in, no direction at all, suddenly Harry is in Tom's grip, Hermione is with him, and is mortally wounded? If you are going to jump the plot like that, why not just take us to the end and summarize the action that happened with a couple of sentences. How did such a significant plot event happen? You gave us nothing! I kept reading thinking that I would discover it was Harry's dream.
I was enjoying this until this chapter.

I have read this story up to this point and have enjoyed it. The breakdown with Molly Weasley is the most ridiculous thing that I have read in a long time. I am moving on to a different story.

Anyone stating to read this should go and find a proper story as this suddenly falls apart at chapter fifteen. It becomes untter and total rubish that is no longer a Harry Hermione story but a Neville longbottom story with no indication that it was going to become so or that the story before chapter 16 would be abandoned at the end of Chapter fifteen. NOT WORTH WASTING TIME READING AT ALL. The writer has either fallen and damaged his head or someone hit him with a thickness spell.

Yay! Found someone who writes a fallible Harry, not superhero.

I have to say that this is a great story. The intrigue and feel of unease that the author has presented in this piece is amazing. Every time it looks like an opportunity to have peace something happens that makes sense and makes the reader want to continue. I really, really hope that the author will continue to work on this piece. Characterization is amazing. The action was amazing. The entire piece is just great. Please complete this story for my own sanity and the sanity of others who have been reading this. Do it for, "The greater good." lol. I really enjoyed this work.

You realize that you killed Nevil's Gran off two chapters ago, don't you?

Good story anyway.

Right, there seems to be a problem with this fic. Not just because of some of the glaring continuity errors, *cough* Augusta Longbottom *cough*, but because, judging by your summery the main plot point of this story, the 'accident' (fight/murder attempt) jars the story completely. Although the Neville thing could have been a good plot point, and liked the working together thing it sort of committed suicide because you killed just about everyone off, totally disregarding any of the relationships that you had spent over half the story developing. What. the. Hell.

In fact the entire flow of the story, which was initially about the strained relationship between Harry and Dumbledore because of Sirius' Last Prank, and the character development and learning progress made up due to this event on all sides, became a pale shadow of one of the sh**er Bond movies, then you killed off the remaining two not-quite-but-may-as-well-be main characters.

In fact what you appear to have here is a partially un-betaed what if fanfic of your own fanfic in the fanfic that it's the fanfic of. There are so many things wrong with that it's not funny. Just so you know from what I gather, it is a terrible idea to throw away good character development, like Ron's reconciliation, Harry comforting a Slythrin, or Remus's new lease on life.

The first part however was excellent and I sincerely hope you rethink the timeskip, or at least how long it was, because to be honest for the most part Harry forgetting everything (permanently) defeated the purpose of the first part of the story.

Looks like Hermione and Harry may be separating...which would be disasterous for Hermione and Kathryn since the best place is in his presence. I do not by that Neville gave himself and Luna up, something else must have happened.