boring

Ok I really like the story. It's interesting and original. But I think I have to stop reading it. It's not the plot or characters or anything of the sort. It's the Japanese. It's annoying as hell. I don't speak Japanese. I don't read Japanese. I don't know the language and every time I read this story, it's right there. It's unnecessary. It is actually detracting from your story. It will only make the story better if you take it out. I have to literally stop reading your story because with it unnecessarily in there it is painful to read. You are a good writer. Don't ruin it with weeaboo shit. Respect yourself more than that.

Wow i love this prologue. Enough to catch a reader's attention and the twist of pain -ok im just being dramatic. On with the story... hehe.

Interesting story. Hope im gonna enjoy it!

Maah, maah... What happened to the two different endings? One yaoi, one straight? Did they get scrapped? Are they in a different fic? Are they yet to be written?

Oh, right, review, uhm... I really liked the story, it was exciting, thrilling, mysterious yet informative... I liked the style you used while writing it. I also liked how you made Kyuubi somewhat caring towards Natsu behind all the anger and hate, but in a way where the demon could mask it as selfishness and/or self-preservation. Or at least, I think he masked it.

Anyway, I'm going to log off and do something with my life now. Thank you for your wonderful contribution to this fandom!

I like the idea you have of Itachi raising Naruto, and Baku for a time, but you have a lot of grammar errors. They are mostly repeats of the same few errors: missing words, mispellings, incorrect word tenses (specifically were and was), and incorrect punctuation-mostly lack of commas. There were also a few sentences that just needed rewording along with incorrect ussage of "then" (avword used to show a sequence of events in time) and "than" (a word used to show comparison between two things).

...Cute.
-And that is all for my first review.
-Kira.-

This is really great! I really liked it.

The writing isn't very good. The story seems mediocre, but that's probably just because it's only the second chapter.

Tentrn... like...sasuke?! I should stop reading this story right here, right now.

omg...such an awesome story...cant wait to read it again

great story

This is great!

er... um... is this yaoi? because the chapter 1 sounded yaoi-ish... i dont like yaoi...

cool...i really enjoyed reading that fic..it is very interesting and intense when it came to the action..at some point i find it funny because of the character name Joshua...overall, it is an awesome fic..can't wait to read more from you

normally i can follow the most confusing stories, but what the hell. the ending left a dozen questions unanswered, and created a dozen more. is there going to be a sequel or is it going to torture us for all eternity. on a different note, great story