Reported. put this on f.i.c.t.i.o.n.p.r.e.s.s it's where it belongs.

There's nothing more romantic than the hopeless social life of a thirteen-year-old boy who never leaves the computer. I can only assume that "this girl" is your IM buddy you talk to for two minutes every night.

Your use of (haha) as a neumatic device strongly hearkens back to the work of e.e. cummings and other literary giants, but following it up mere stanzas later by "maby" and your laughable signature simply diminishes its singsong tone.

The abrupt appearance of the gate in the last line accurately portrays the torment of the mind, and ties back to the book Y2K-9 brilliantly. (Stanzas 2 and 4 worried me that you had forgotten your central theme.)

You may be surprised to realize that "maybe" is the correct spelling of your so-called "maby."

(haha)

So, dude, I read this poem like ages ago, and never reviewd, and I saw it again (dont ask me HOW or WHY) and I was wondering, did ya ever get the Girl? I mean, its been, what, a year and more then twelve months? If ya havent then.. well, thats just sad, and if ya have, then good for you buddy.

anyways hope you will answer my question! :P

megmae

oh ive got it

is this girl me?

i know i know im just too smart 4 my own good

oh well

smarter than u

i also read that u like this girl

do u have a crush on me

please look past the fact that i am frank the guy

that can easily be changed

Sweet! I like! I guess if I were that girl I'd definitely ask you out if you gave me that poem. :)

-Dali

'ALLO

R U ASHLEIGH WACHMAN

that was horrible. y2k-9 is a book about a dog and that poem had nothing to do with it. also, terrible rhymes. hey im not trying to be mean, just honest.

she'll fall for u and if she doesn't i'll take care of that ( i'll make her change her mind )

okay good luck with that , nice poem.

i agree w/ every one else

GiVE HER A POEM!

ask her out!

what bad will come out of it if you do?

and if you don't it will sit, nagging at the back of your mind FOREVER!

come on!

trust me, any girl in their right mind would like a guy to write a poem to them!

better yet, slip it in her locker

and one the next day of something like that.

do that till you feel bold enough to actually talk to her.

Is it too late for me to tell you to write her a poem? Well, I say you should tell her! Any girl dumb enough to turn down someone that writes her a poem is way not worth your interest anyway. Ganbaru yo!

-Shadow

Author, Otaku, Artist, Insane.

Well I say give her the poem to ask her out cuz I have yet to meet a girl who would hate to have a guy write a poem for her. Seriously girls like that stuff. But this is a pretty good poem you got here. Glad your computer's working. And if she says no to you tell her she HAS to go out with you b/c Ariana Strider says so! Ha!

wow its been a long time since u've posted ne thing. i like this poem. i think you should ask her out! go for it! _
Rain )

Dude,
with poetry like that,
(And a little luck)
ShE WiLL SaY YES!
besides, what's the worst
that can happen?
_

give her a poem! *cheers ya on*