There's only one word to describe this story: GREAT! It's so fucking well written, like all of your other stories, that I'm beginning to think that you're a professional writer. And the dark atmosphere...delicious. Hikari was a little bit OOC, in my opinion, but considering what happened I think it's pretty realistic (I would have done the same). Thank you for having written this story.

An entertaining piece, although the profiling was a bit silly, the author has clearly watched too much TV, the whole getting into the mind of the killer/victims thing was taken a bit too literally.

Woah! You had me thinking it was Maya the whole time! Boy was I wrong. The way you kept the plot moving to distort and confuse who the killer might be was nothing short of Brilliant! Furthermore I can't help but notice that the Misato's profiling skills are handled here greatly resmbled those used by Will Grahm in the 1986 movie Manhunter. Create the ctiminal's psyche within you own then use that to anticipate his/her motives.

I will also say that unlike many dark stories out there the motivation here actually made sense(even if I find the murdering slightly OOC) and it was an excellent work of mystery genre well worth the time.

Awesome, simply awesome. This was the perfect thriller to end my night with. It had me guessing all night long. In the interest of not putting spoilers up (although someone probably already did that in the reviews before) I'm not going to say here what went though my mind, but I was wrong on every count.

Very well done. Thanks for this most excellent read.

Holy Cats... Just... Wow... Talk about... not having words to describe what I just read. Damned good tale. It just... Speechless...

I loved this story! You had me guessing the whole way through and I still didn't figure the killer's identity untill the end. However, I agree you should add a epilouge but with or without one this is still great.

Nice, you had me thinking that someone else was the killer for a while, but you got me in the end.

A very well-written piece of work, a respectable offering for the crime genre. The big reveal seemed like a bit of a stretch to me though... her connection with the techs just doesn't strike me as believable.

that was...well frankly disturbing but it was well written bravo

I understand that my concerns might be inappropriately prioritized(what with the gun Hikari had, and all), but where the heck did that girl get a voice scramblizer thing? I understand her father works for NERV, but I think they must have some sort of policy about not taking company machinery home to amuse the children...

Where she could get that apparently highly specialized poison also evades me... They must be selling everything on the streets these days...

This one had me guessing all over the place. I'm still wondering why the first one had a smile though. Enjoyable and addicting. I hope you make more mystery stories in the future. I particularly enjoyed the profiling thought processes...wish I'd thought of that.

Wow...Great story, keep it up.

Wow, great stuff. Although i figured out who it was early on, well, had an idea anyway. Something about Hikari just didnt sit with me, and i figured she's the only person who really had a motive that i could think off. Touji.

Anyway, like i said, excellent story dude, like all your other stuff, keep it up.

- Piccolo9

When it comes to the noir/mystery/suspense section this is by far the best fic ive ever read. for such a small amount of words it rivals many of the novels of this gerne that ive read. if it took 8 months to write this it was worth it...its a master peice.

Very well written, and I never would have suspected who the killer was. The only flaw I can see is that it would be hard for the killer to get a gun... assuming that Japan's gun control laws remained the same after Second Impact.