gut-wrenching so far very sad.

OMG...0.0

You MUST u[date! Please do!

Damn doctor...Top of my hate list with you!

UPDATE!

~Denvana~

Excellent so far. very powerful.

This story is amazing. I can hardly wait for more chapters. Keep up the wonderful work!

like it lots

like is thus far

I have to start off by admitting that this is one of the most purely honest stories I have ever read on this site. It is not to say that I had distrusted you specifically, but because I don't trust anyone in the age group that uses this site, I was ready to read this and say 'Ugh, personal experience my ass. This person doesn't no anorexia from a hernia.' However, I was surprised that this description was incredibly accurate. So, i figured you had either at one point in your life had an eating disorder (and if that's the case I do hope you've moved on from it!) or ... you are very perceptive. Whatever the case may be, and I'm not trying to pry into your personal life, this story came out significantly sincere.

Now, on the subject of sincerity, I want to apologize for when I emailed you, I was trying to feed my newborn niece, and I was incredibly distracted. So, if it sounded a little creepy or vague, I apologize (also for the fact that it is six months overdue!) I was saying before about how you were spot-on with describing Kai's anorexia ... I am not anorexic myself! But, I had gotten real sick, and wasn't eating so much, and I can sort of relate with what he's going through. Even when he ate the candy at the beginning, I could relate. Candy's got too many artificial flavors, so when I was starving and went to that, I got even more sick (and, ugh, I was so sick of being sick! Hahaha! Thankfully, I've gotten better - I even had to make a sushi run in the middle of this review.) I know that when you're that hungry, you pig out when you don't even know. I can't feel hunger so hot, so I used to get real hungry all of the sudden and didn't have time to prepare a nice meal (and I love to cook, too!) so I was living on peanut-butter-and-banana sandwiches. Oi, oi, oi! And here I go, ranting. Well, to cap this paragraph off: The fact that Kai started with the disorder directly after Mokuba's dream is so psychologically perfect! _ I just wanted you to know.

So, the little blurb at the bottom of this page gives me a nice little tip to tell you what you can improve, so I might as well do as it suggests. Now, that was a downer of an opener! Hahaha! In the sequel to this (which I will hopefully get around to reviewing), you had a whole author's note section (which I hope you continue) where you said something about how you were very vague and that you were proud about it. However, as writing what you truly feel is very important, just as important is writing to attract others. I'm not saying 'Be the stereotypical writer!', but I am suggesting that you write so that it is easier to follow and doesn't intimidate others by being so vague. If you want to teach through your writing, as you suggest in your profile, you will make note of what I am saying. I think, to sum up, that you are a good writer, but you need to balance that with a moving, just-as-polished plotline. And I know, that is about a million times harder than it sounds (and you would think I'm exaggerating here ... but I'm not _)

I think the reason that I become captivated with what you are doing is because you remind me of the 'me' of last year. This sounds so arrogant! But, it is not that I have improved and am condescending you now like a would a child. My writing merely changed because of different influences, and now we seem to have much different styles. You seem very comfortable in yourself now, but I think that the best advice to give you is to completely open up when you write - no holds bar! You did it in this story, but I wish for you to continue in your later works.

Well then, 2006 world-record 'Longest Review Writer' signing out!

-TK Anez

i love this fic, please update soon!

Reading the whole thing was the ultimate experience. You take the place of Seto incredibly well, and your writing style goes beyond brushing Kaiba's means, but as vulgar as I may put it, you snatch the damn guy, tear off his clothing, slap it onto the viewer's, and pass the audience off as the manic business tycoon. Honestly, don't EVER even think of stopping. Your writing is astounding. Read my fiction sometime...even if I could never write this well...

this is so sad as in crying sad

AH! YOU'RE SCARING ME!

I have finally found someone who doesn't write like

ths

or thes

And finally some one has good grammar_

(no, I'm not a , I'm only 12!)

This is the best story of all time. I've said it before, and I still stand by my word. This is just so fucking beautiful. I love you. ;_; So much. Keep writing. And please don't make it Seto X Jono at the end ;_;

Man, am I glad you updated! _ I love this story, it rules! Maybe, if you want, do you think you can review my story, "My Last Breath"? It also deals with eating disorders and such. _~ anyway, update soon!

Man, am I glad you updated! _ I love this story, it rules! Maybe, if you want, do you think you can review my story, "My Last Breath"? It also deals with eating disorders and such. _~ anyway, update soon!