"Accident"

It's zazu and sarabi

Love it!

Lots of spelling errors!
1) lay, no ly
2) knowledge, not knolige
3) responsible, not responcible
4) Sarabi, not the way u spelled it
5) mane, not main
Other then those your story is acceptable.
Improve your skills!

Great job! I love it. Cliffhanger! :D

Luv it! Bit of mystery in this story? LOL Great job keep writing you're brilliant!

O M G !

Firstly I love the Lion King, great movie and the one play I've seen on it is also very good.

Secondly this story is really good. Really enjoyed it, kept me interested the whole time, and I can tell that this is going to get goood.

Thirdly Happy Thanksgiving!

I like your story it is very good.

Great story, I really enjoyed reading it :)

Hey, thought I oughta get round to reading some of yours. It was good how you were able to leave a lot of unanswered questions in the story up unto the final chapter. The end was great. I liked the plot and the ideas and all (although I can never really see Nala lying to Simba, but then I guess that's what made it such a good surprise). There are a few words, even towards the end, that you might want to get spellcheck for, but at least you were able to get all the names down (Sarabi, Zazu) eventually. Good story, and brilliant for a first TLK fanfic, gonna go on now and read the rest. Well done.

Good story. I liked it; it came out better than I had thought it would at first, although there are some spelling errors. So, Kiara and Vitani are half-sisters, huh?

good so far. ive read till chapter 7 so far and its good

I just love how you explained that weird nick in Zira's ear. I think the plot was a really good one. You did an excellent job on this.

awe

i almost cried when i read this

simba is SO sweet

i wish one of my boyfriends could like that

lol

well i can't wait to finish reading this

i love the story

i loved it!