Reviews for Rayllum Birthday Bash 2020
Fallen-AngelxNoNo chapter 12 . 7/23
I like the story and its good to know that you still post, tbh i had written you off as a "dead" author as in you know longer post anything as your last update for anything was 2018, and and after reading your last update for spirits creed,i could understand why (also i'm sorry for your lost, even though it happened a while ago). i'm really glad to see that you post anything really as you are a talented author and i loved Spirits Creed i read it since you had chapter 11 and i love it, everytime i rejoin the avatar fandom and start reading its fanfiction i always reread yours (its hard to find a serious/realistic, romantic, interesting ploted, story for most child friendly shows like avatar).
i do hope that this means that your coming back to the writing scene, but i wont get my hopes up, i have seen a few authors who were "dead" come "back to life" before its been few, but there's always the unicorns like one author i read who went on a hiatus after finishing his last story for 4 years and come back with a 25k word chapter 1 for a new story that was amazing and turned into a 630k multi work series, but like i said they are unicorns we don't see those everyday.
i do understand if this is your last work as a lot can happen in 2 years, children/death/marriage/incarceration, new job/home/country/langue, and taxes.
anyway i do like the story and decided to give it a read (even though i never heard of dragon prince till you posted this) and found it interesting, a nice, well written short drabble series. and i decided to finally comment as i did not know the fandom and as a rule do not read fictions from fandoms i do not know/like, and i decided to read this as its only 6k words and could finish it in about 10 minutes (i can read fast)
thanks for the update and for posting and sorry for my awful grammar(and sorry that my review is mostly about other fandoms and not about this one).
P.S i do not remember the poll results for the fate of Spirits Creed but if you do rewrite it/update it will it have, a Zuko harem?(of others not including mistress tajas girls and ty lee and her sisters were always cute). i thought it was hinted and then Jin did say she was open to sharing him with other girls. and if so will Yue join (unlikely I know but their marriage makes sense from a political standpoint and few fictions tough upon this)
Will there be pregnancy among the main characters(and not at the near/very end)? in action heavy/realistic stories like Spirits Creed, pregnancy almost always a interesting thing and makes the stories more interesting and adds a new level of intrigue, at least in my experiences, and it would make sense as after what happened in chapter 12.
and will it continue after the war is over like with rebuilding the fire nation? the fire nation when the war started was extremely prosperous and had high manufacturing power and for most countries like that war is a boon as it boost their economy making war machines and charging a ton for each one, so they would need to cut back on making weapons and also THE COLONIES one of the most, if not the most aggravating things about the ending of avatar was the fire nation giving up the colonies, if this was not a kids show most of the fire nation would of revolted because suddenly your leader is telling you to abandon the teritority your people spent generations fighting and dying for and won from your enemies, and ignoring the people's revolt, the fire nation would of face mass famine and a depression due to it being a island nation meaning that there are things it can not produce itself like large amounts of metal, oil, trees, and food as they have limited space and limited fertile soil and few oil and metal deposits and they could not get most of these as no nation will want to trade with them and those private member that do will sell at heavily inflated prices. honestly looking at it from a realistic perspective they would of been fine keeping the north western portion of the earth kingdom (if you look on a map next to the north air islands you'll see a portion of the earth kingdom that seperated by 2 rivers) that part and the air islands would of been enough as they likley had plenty of natural resources the nation could use till others were open for trade. (and i know all this as im studying economics and history in collage and this is pretty basic once you know enough). and it would be a good political aspect of the story showing our heros that they can not brute force their way through everything.
really this is it now, if you read this far congratulations you get a cookie, and thank you for reading this, bye now for real. :)
RVA-Writer chapter 8 . 7/15
Theses are fun little reads. Keep it up
Bonzenz chapter 7 . 7/13
What the fuck how do they have 25 children please tell me they adopted.