Reviews for Harry Potter: The Gamer
Cleddyf chapter 3 . 10h
I'm a sucker for Gamer fics. Going to keep an eye on this. This could be fun. And I wouldn't listen to one of the prior posters, it's totally fine if you want Harry not to be 'Gray' or 'Evil'.
Hathowda Jun chapter 3 . 14h
Ah, love the fresh ways to raise attributes.
Am happy to see very short skill descriptions.
You did mention in the other chapter author note that the story would get better once Harry has more freedom.
I love the story so far. Here're some ideas:
Don't have Harry go to Diagon Alley or have him explore Surrey/Privet Drive. it's done too much. This good story needs to go somewhere more interesting.
Use the Gamer Powers in some way to have him explore other wizards' and witches' homes. That would be interesting to see.
Hathowda Jun chapter 2 . 15h
Nice vibes again, good but standard story so far.
Feedback:
You don't need to put 'loving (read crazy)' aunt up there. Just loving in italics is fine, people will get the meaning. This will hardly be anyone's first time reading a Gamer fanfic.
And again I just say that the fic can be better if you just ditched the well known explanations. Unless you're changing something big, don't explain what a map, an instant dungeon, an inventory, etc. are.
Hathowda Jun chapter 1 . 15h
Story feels good.
To make it better, you can do away with the descriptions for the attributes. You haven't really changed anything from the usual meanings so just remove the attribute descriptions. It will be a nice change, I promise.
sudhush chapter 3 . 17h
Good chapter and even though small it feels complete. Keep up the good writing, bye until next chapter.
Dr1zzy chapter 3 . 19h
Good start
elreyshadow94 chapter 2 . 22h
Story so far is good and I like it but this chapter had more fillers such as new skill and their level and corresponding information for a chapter like this it needed to be more longer to add to the story cause it just read like you just rushed it. So far the story is great and I like the detail to quirks of the game system you added such as it saying slow as a tortoise.
Tiwa Vol chapter 1 . 7/12
not impressed, you've pretty much locked him into the hero path. im very much a fan of grey/dark (and evil though people dont seem to be able to right evil without going all edgey clicheI lean more to been selfish, more human, that fanfiction writers tend to stray from)

I tend to see the gamer system as the ultimate neutral just there to assist the gamer reach there peak how ever they like, though some do make some twists to them, which tend to turn out bad with the mc been a beta to the system. (do this quest or die, do that quest or lose all hald your stats)

yeah so you've given harry this system and told him that if he isnt a good guy hes going to die or wish he was. not for me at all.

just my thoughts, alot of people will like thsi for no other rreasom than its a gamer fic, so have fun with it.
GameWhino chapter 2 . 7/2
Excellent start to a gamer fic. I'm looking forward to see where you go with it.
Reader of Harry Potter chapter 1 . 6/29
Nice Start.