Yo, really loving it so far dude! Im a sucker for characters that burn the wick at both ends. brings a good sense of urgency and all that fun stuff! A bit bummed that it seems like the story was dropped, but i eagerly await the next chapter!

curse you for making this story so good!

Ummm this is not a review more like a question, what’s with is the brackets about description?

.. was the open and close parenthesis necessary?

Gah I need more of this Haha Good Job making this story Bud

Check ur PM buddy. I have something for you

Do what you gotta do to make your story feel right for you

Great chapter!

Editing and polishing is a part of the writing process I wish more people on this site appreciated. Good for you! It shows one is taking their writing seriously when they actually want to make it better. I appreciate that mindset it if nothing else.

Thanks for the update and I will look forward to reading more silver Spector

take all the time that you need! I don't remember the quote correctly from Mulan but it says something about the last to bloom is the most beautiful flower! Also, take care, the virus is everywhere.

It cool, i mean you where putting out chapters pretty fast. I mean basically 100k words in a month is freaky fast, like are you even human fast.

Good chapter. I actually liked the dialogue in this chapter. The nuance of Weiss saying that they were all to blame for what happened, being interpreted by Yang as being targeted at Blake was interesting. I feel that their argument panned out naturally, especially regarding the book's importance and Weiss' departure from Atlas.

Further, Blake being self-depreciating, Yang getting angry at Weiss, and Weiss getting angry at everyone (including herself) was all in character.

Overall, I quite enjoyed this.

Ps. In regard to the story's length, I am quite happy to hear that there is a ways to go. I am absolutely here for the ride.

Congratulations, this chapter really makes it clearer at how fucking arrogant and obnoxious Yang is. Hell, here she sounds far more bitchier than Weiss! I mean, look at Weiss, she's pissed because one fucking loudmouthed arrogant blonde foiled their effort by just opening her mouth, but she admitted it to Oobleck as whole team's fault without insinuating Yang's terrible, utterly stupid blunder. Blake doesn't help by getting too sidetracked by her prejudice towards Weiss to notice Yang just revealed her trump card to Neo, basically a deliberate blunder that that actually affects her in real way rather than Weiss who just happened to be born a Schnee. Idk if it's intentional or not but congratulations you make me dislike BY so much, and I really wish Weiss or the Grimm or the enemies can give Yang an ass-whooping so hard she actually learns to stop being an arrogant buffoon and think with her brain instead with her muscles and mouth.

Goddammit Yang, learn to own up your mistake, not throwing a tantrum! Your hubris really makes Weiss looks like the humblest person ever in Remnant!

I always put Jaune as a diplomat in my head, as he is not much of a frontliner fighter. And I really want to thank him for diffusing the tension. If only he could put some logic to Yang meathead-ness, but I know he didn't do that because Yang would fire back by insulting his subpar combat skill. Even when Yang is clearly in the fault, it's wise of him not to fuel the fire with the blame game.

So... okay, I admit this chapter is... frustrating. Not only because Yang is such a bitch, the latter half of the chapter feels... weak. Really, I don't know how to put a finger on it, but the scene between the team and Oobleck and Port feels so flimsy. It's just like... it's happening for the sake of it's happening, when it is supposed to be a solemn report of a failure. And how Oobleck already trust Blake, who is an outsider and have no clear objective like Weiss? He's scatterbrained yes, but he won't be as careless as handwaving a failure of a team who has an outsider and "trust" them easily.

You know, I think you should get second opinion when writing a chapter you don't feel confident in before you post it as an update. An author is their own worst critic yes, but sometimes you need to have an outside perspective to point out the flaws you possibly can't put your finger on because you're too close to your work.

I'm sorry if I offend you in any way, but this chapter is just...wow. I never ever ever want to give Yang an ass kicking as bad as I am now.

I think the argument was written pretty well. I mean anyone would be upset about that. And it kinda gives the base of they haven't really got used to each other. I mean they were all together for like a day or two? So it's understandable. Other than that great chapter and can't wait for the next