Hey! I clicked on this story super interested in the premise, but was completely confused and disappointed to see it was Gravity Falls and My Little Pony? I don't follow either of those shows and it was jarring to expect Steven Universe and immediately get Dipper, Mabel and Pacifica. Perhaps mark it was a crossover?

That all being said, the writing is very good! I like how you set the scene and are heavy with visual descriptions. It seemed to lack emotional detail, but I am sure that won't be the case as the story progresses.

Good luck and have fun writing!

I think this story belongs in the crossover section of the site rather than the pure Steven universe section.