Next up is Chapter 24: Konoha Saiyan vs Earth Saiyan.

Try to read this and then you will get that this fic is just bits ,there is no real work done to make this fic a smooth flow from one chapter to another. You need to remake or make changes

Next up is Chapter 23: Chunin exams pt6.

Next Chapter is Chapter 22: Chunin exams pt5.

The story has no clear Direction. You are simply copy and pasting events

Your stories are interesting and likable, but you need to work on your writing technique. I wanna read your stories but it gets annoying when you start every paragraph with “after” or “he”. I’m not trying to flame or insult you in anyway just trying to give you a little advice. Find a beta reader or get advice from your fellow writers on how to improve your skill. Hope to see improvement in the future.

Next chapter is Chapter 21: Chunin exams pt4.

You are without a doubt the worst writer on this entire site. Delete this and all your pieces of trash and never come back.

Eres sin duda el peor escritor en todo este sitio. Elimina esto y todos tus pedazos de basura y nunca vuelvas.

Next chapter is Chapter 20: Chunin exams pt3.

I'm sorry but your story makes no sense at all. I honestly feel that you could do better than this.

Next chapter is Chapter 19: Chunin exams pt2.

Next chapter is Chapter 18: Chunin exams pt1.

Next chapter is Chapter 17: Chunin exams pt1

I commend you for being consistent and making chapters but I urge you to practice your writing skills.. The story is mostly lacking and repetitive. It is Hard to take the characters seriously when they speak in such a childish way.. You probably speak a different language. So my advice to you is to make one shots before making stories and look for a Beta Reader. Baby steps first and I am 100% confident that you will do just fine. Thank you for reading my review and have a blessed day... do not be discouraged by the bullies

dropei