It doesn't have to be the same just have naruto there and change things

Great job

if sasuke ends up being here ima be mad

Awesome chapter keep it up

Keep it up!

Blake scene ruined it for me, that was so fucking dumb and nowhere near sexual harassment, Inappropriate and rude? yes but don't you ever fucking belittle what actual victims have gone through by comparing it to that you piece of shit.

Dude pick a strength and competency level and stick to it, getting kinda sick of seeing post war naruto run into walls, pass out or get a bloody nose from falling it takes any sort of seriousness out of the story and it really isn't funny at all so i have no idea why your writing that stuff in.

Update please

I am imagining the body thing as he traveled dimensions, do digusting ugh!

Deine Story ist definitiv interessant und ich werde sie auf jeden Fall weiter verfolgen. Aber ich muss schon sagen das dein Naruto ein Trauerspiel ist. Das er sein Nindo so schnell fallen lässt. Und das Kuruma und Co nichts dagegen unternehmen. Mir blutet echt das Herz wenn ich es so lese. Oder wie wenig es Naruto emotional berührt hatte, dass Sakura gestorben ist. Darauf komme ich am aller meisten nicht klar.

Was ist nun eigentlich mit Ruby‘s Chakra passiert? Hat sich bei Ihr durch Naruto‘s Infusion was verändert?

Mach weiter so und schöne Grüße aus Deutschland

Google translation

Your story is definitely interesting and I will definitely follow it up. But I have to say that your Naruto is a tragedy. That he drops his nindo so quickly. And that Kuruma and Co do nothing about it. My heart is really bleeding when I read it like this. Or how little it had touched Naruto emotionally that Sakura had died. Most of all, I can't deal with that.

So what happened to Ruby's chakra? Did something change with her Naruto infusion?

Keep it up and greetings from Germany

P.S. took you up on your suggestion of Rick Astley and happy I did. Wish away my favorite so far.

wish I would have reviewed in earlier chapters sorry about that but, I have enjoyed the story so far and just wanted to let you know I am super excited to see how everything plays out, best of luck with future chapters and stay safe during these crazy times.

Great chapter. I have a question, since Naruto has Obito's eyes able to slide between objects so he could enter without moving the statue .Also the pairing is Naruto and Ruby and I haven't seen any moment between them

Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one!

I can see what you’re going for here, with the conflict in the team and the rising tensions. I can also see what you’re intending to do to resolve it, believe me I understand your reasonings. But you kind of created a plothole that makes this all unnecessary.

The obvious answer would be Shadow Clones, but then your reasoning comes that it would be too risky because someone might catch Naruto in two places at the same time. Alright, I’ll accept that, but then in the very same chapter, you introduced the “Ninja Art: Genjutsu: Peeper’s Delight” which I assume works similarly to the Transparent Escape Technique, but instead of being invisible, simply causes other people to basically ignore your existence.

So the question becomes, why wouldn’t Naruto simply use that in conjunction with the Kage Bunshin? I mean, they would have no reason to look for him if his clone takes his place, so Naruto should be able to stay relatively unnoticed. You even emphasized that even with people actively looking for him, only a few were able to actually see him, and I’m assuming they were from the higher years.

Once again, I get what you’re going for with the drama in Team Deathstalker, there’s just simply a glaring oversight you might have missed.

Another point I wanted to bring up was the conflict between Naruto and Yang as well as Naruto and Pyrrha. Once more, I get what the reason for it was (or at least, I think I do), but for others it may seem like it came completely out of left field. In other words, I think you need to bring more context in those instances and explain the reasoning better, otherwise it would look as if Naruto just suddenly acted OOC for absolutely no reason. It doesn’t have to be a direct explanation, you just need to show that “something“ is affecting Naruto, thus implying he would otherwise not act this way if that “something” was not present.

The last point I wanted to address was how you basically just skipped over the entire reason why Team Deathstalker would want Naruto replaced. It’s supposed to be one of the more remembered scenes in your fanfic, since I assume it’s going to contain a confrontation and then a fight, which will then lead to Naruto changing his ways.

Now, I know that you want to just breeze past the Beacon Arc like you said since you feel that it’s overdone, but you should still dedicate more time in important scenes that would actively affect the Main Character, enough that it will change how they act in the rest of the story.

Because if you’re going to do it like this, the upcoming intervention with Team Deathstalker wouldn’t really have that much of an impact. Since us readers didn’t really get to experience the tension rise, we wouldn’t be able to relate as much to the characters. We wouldn’t be able to feel their frustrations as much as we would have had you actually described the gradual worsening of their relationship.

I would understand if you were looking to have this fanfic end in about a few chapters since things like those won’t matter as much, but since you’re planning on having this reach at least the Vytal Tournament Arc, then moments like those - moments in where it would actively change a Main Character’s point of view - need to be described in more detail. They need more substance in order to be important to the plot.

Just something to keep in mind. Hope this helps.