Powerful start, with a disaster & serious conflict in not allowing the doctors to help him. Nice mystery w/Sofia's condition. Good idea w/the nurse bringing a note, then reading it, and even showing it was real. Solid descriptions from there. Oh how I wish I could have a healing potion these past 9 1/2 years.

Head injury for Sofia? That can be serious. From a dream- interesting. Made sense to me and it seemed in character. Great ending & story!

Cedric didn't seem out of character to me. It was pretty good. Congrats on your tenth story!

simply wonderful.

Cute!

Awww! That was so sweet! :) Cedric would be that stubborn. And Sofia would send that sort of note. I loved it!

I actually thought this was good. I would have liked a bit more of everything, but it's still good. It reminds me of your first story, but better. So, this is older Sofia, I'm assuming. I want to know what their relationship is at this point, but it's not super important. I love how Cedric refused to take the potion that would keep him from dying, just because he didn't know if Sofia was all right. Like, without her, life wouldn't be worth living. That's sweet to me, though some people might call it stupid. I also liked the "I love you" in Sofia's note.

Mistake: 'Why hadn't he just asked about her instead just assuming' Missing 'of.'

Aww this was so sweet, the way it was going at first I was legit concerned it would have a sad ending. Glad I was wrong. The ending was particularly precious. I loved it!