Alright, I may not be one to talk because of how I portray the two in my fics, but you're happily allow to ignore my words, 1prittypony1. First off, I feel that Henry's response to Hyde should have been much more anger driven, considering what Hyde had done to him. And second of all, though I do like the idea of Hyde feeling regretful because things went too far, I do feel that more of his thought process needed to be shown, like him explaining further why he didn't want the nightmares to break Henry.

Now, alongside this, the layout of the fic is dreadful. Is that a mistake from the site or is that intentional? If so, it might be best to change the format so it's easy to read. Also, there were a few grammatical errors and commas needed to be used more. But aside from all this, the fic was sweet and harmless.

I hope you keep writing and get better. X3

-From RB. X3