looking good so far

This is really interesting. Please continue!

This is really interesting. You just need to work on your punctuation. Sometimes you put the quotation marks in front of the punctuation, you shouldn’t do that. And sometimes you ad an extra space after the first quotation mark.
Anyway, please keep up the great work!

So this is Miyuverse Shirou?

Damn this dope as hell

Is this a fusion of Fate shirou and oath under snow shirou?

Assuming the starting chapters have been rewrote, solid prologue!

can't wait for more

MAs. Cap

Some of the words should have been capitalized, like Grimm or Beowolf. You did it to Beringel.

You're also missing punctuation marks before the closing quotation marks. You'll do this sometime:

"Test" he said.

It should be:

"Test," he said.

better, i like this one.

This is looking like a relly good start, just try to keep some sort of pace for yourself. Good luck with schooling!

where is the new chapter? it's too early for april fool.

Eh, too early to judge properly. Im not the biggest fan of convenient isekai prologues, but thats just personal preference, not valid criticism.

Nice job. Keep up the good work.