finish this

Was wondering when someone would actually do a SI of Skyrim in this manner.
Unfortunately, while not on the bad scale of what I've read, it's not really in the good either: some typos aside, you rushed through the opening set-piece, wasting plenty of potential to properly establish both the SI and this Dragonborn, it's the first chapter you should try to hook people more.

Major gripes: at the end when the SI jumps from the tower and you mention a crack when he lands, I don't want to believe you actually meant his leg cracked and not the wood, because no, just no... no one can actually shake off from a cracked leg, it's damn cracked, there's no excuse you can make here man, the moment anyone would put any kind of weight on it fighting through the pain or something, they'd keel over, or worse, cause the snapped bone to get worse and break the skin.
Getting slowed down would be an understatement, he'd be dead weight before he even started the Alduin dodging, hell, an injury like this is pretty much it for the character if magic isn't involved, this could have been fixed if you didn't rush the entire section: maybe the Dragonborn could have healed him, taking into consideration the PC starting with a Restoration spell.
Also, while part of the actual script, Ralof and Hadvar's face off feels so jarring when you did even less than the game does to set them up. Again, all because you decided to rush through this.

This is an overall meh from me. I'll stick around since it's only the first chapter, but if you intent to continue to rush this much I don't really see myself following much more.