I'm wondering if Osman knew that something screwy was going on with MBI, and sent John over to get someone on the inside, even if he didn't know it. It just seems a little odd to me - Serin's behavior doesn't add up. While she does hold sympathy for her Spartan brethren, she also went through the same conditioning as the rest - put the mission first. Additionally, she was snatched up by Parangosky after her Augmentations, and then groomed to be her successor. After an upbringing such as this, it seems suspicious that she would be so open and sympathetic, even to another Spartan. It also seems strange that all the Spartans have been retired, especially since they are likely all just hitting their prime, not to mention the fact that they are likely the single most expensive assets in the UNSC armoury. However, sending in a sleeper agent to infiltrate and observe a possible threat seems right up ONI's alley. I think that is the real reason Osman sent him to MBI - after all, if it were really innocuous, why bother hiding John's identity from them?

Thank you for the really enjoyable story so far. I initially grabbed it in a batch of stories that caught my eye and it was one of the few that was good enough to make it past a quick scan of the first chapter. It was definitely worth the read so far and I'll be looking forward to more whenever you have the time and inclination to write it.
Thank you again for the time and effort you've put into writing this.

Great

I never thought, it is possible to combine both such different world and make them as one this organically. And you built up this story well, by exploring chief first. Before he gets tangled in the madness that is the sekerei plan. Read the whole story in one evening. I like the easter egg like 343 and bring in characters like Soren. Look forward to next chapters in future.

I think I would have to agree with kamorge0, You took your time building both the world and the Chief up and it really pays off. He feels like an actual character instead of a faceless protagonist and instead of the the easy solution of Chief gets thrown through a wormhole "bam" now in Sekirei land the world has been built up to incorporate both worlds together.

Looking forward to more

this is absolutely spectacular. i really hope this continues. I'm having the time of my life reading this and I'll continue to support the story

So good!

What a phenomenal story. When I read that it was a Halo x Sekirei crossover I legitimately thought I was being memed. It is, in fact, a fantastic character story that has a lot of layers to peel back and enjoy. As of now, I’ve already read it three times and am starting a fourth pass soon.

Let’s start with the good. You took your time setting up the world for the first 4 chapters and didn’t jump straight to the cross. That takes discipline. Putting meat on the bones of a story by building the world can be painfully boring to write and read. You managed to make it as painless as possible and the buildup helped the later chapters have more meaning and impact.

One of the strengths of this story is that it usually always portrays MC in a believable way. Not really understanding money, being bored of his now purposelessness existence but trying to keep forward momentum regardless, the numerous comedic scenes where his lack of understanding plays to a gag. I can believe in the character and that elevates this story far above most others.

Criticisms are a drag, but I’ll try to keep it helpful and benevolent. Grammar and spelling could use a tune up. One time in particular was really hard for me in chapter 9 when Soren is being described. You described the people around him in black and white assemble. Took me a good three minutes to figure out you meant ensemble. Story is so good i’ll probably just review each chapter and point them out so you can take care of them.

As far as story the only real critique I can offer is to be really careful about your consistency when portraying MC. I believe it’s chapter 8 when he meets Miya again to shop for groceries and talked about bacon sushi. Hilarious gag. I was rolling on the floor. Problem was that MC started shooting the shit with her far easier than any other character we’ve seen to date. Hell, he interacted with her more easily than some of the other Spartans. It gave the scene overall a sense of wrongness. Him meeting up with her, believable. Bacon sushi, hilarious. Intentionally teasing her and bashfully calling her beautiful? I felt it would have been more consistent with the character you established if he played the straight man to the same effect. Truly not understanding and voicing general confusion into a lecture from Miya and then flatly saying she looked good for her age. Statement of fact; she is pretty. Have her make Miya blush with his soldier’s bluntness and keep his embarrassment more centered around his civilian ineptitude. We see it again in the host scene where I totally buy he would want to throw the woman molesting him across the building. I’m skeptical he’d blush and squirm like a teenage schoolboy because of that uncomfortability. He acts more embarrassed there then when he repeatedly plays tonsil hockey with Karasuba.

That one kind of dragged on. Sorry about that. Don’t let the critiques give you the impression this is anything less than one of my favorite stories on this site. I’m praying for a May update and ready to eagerly wait if I don’t get it. Thanks for the fun and best of luck moving forward.

I think this story is the best this fandom has to offer. I can’t waif for a new update because this story is phenomenal!

Uhhhh, this story ded or sth?

Well, it's a really good work. A "bit" slow though. Updated: Apr 7 - Published: Jul 24, 2019 Ugh, that's a shame.

But, dammit Homura. Srsly?

Wow, good job making me feel uncomfortable about John's interaction with Halsey. That programming is rather easy to see here. They did a really good job of brainwashing John when he was a kid.

I always kind of hated Halsey and the guys behind the Spartan-II program. There was never any higher purpose behind the program, they just didn't want to lose the power they held over the colonies. The fact that the Spartans were ready to fight the Covenant was a complete coincidence that Halsey and everybody else like her used to justify their sick actions.

Would be pretty interesting to see how he interacts with Akitsu, being the man he is. Also Blue team must know. That's final. Wonder how Kelly would react to this. 117 in Power Armor purging at least SOME xenos must be a thing.

Awesome chapter! I think Kazehana would be a good pick from the og flock. Maybe Uzume too? She is THE best girl in my opinion.

Well... That escalated quickly. I wonder when would his Master Chief persona be known to respected parties. The escalation would be massive I suspect?

The Hero of Humanity, the Demon of the Covenant, and the Spartan 117.